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Eden Sanchez
Member since November 16, 2022
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Can I have my life back
Why am I still here?
Why do you insist on keeping down me here,
Just to make my life more miserable.
Why do you make me hang on?
Hold on for dear life when I’ve been slowly loosing it.
Why do you take away all my fun, everything I do in life to enjoy,
gone.
I wanted to live, but everything that’s worth living for, you took from me.
Being happy everyday, trying to be faithful,
I’m crumbling inside, lying to everyone.
I plead with you, and you don’t answer.
I beg for my life back, but I don’t receive.
What do you want from me?
Is this a trial of my faith?
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I’ve been hanging on for so long,
What more do you want from me?
You’ve taken what I put my heart into,
Making me watch other people achieve My dreams.
Why do you choose to answer me, finally when I was adjusting?
The answers you give, undoing all my work and adjusting to my life.
Taking away more of my dreams, my aspirations.
I was all good, moving on,
Then you snatched it away.
Took my hope and turned it into pain.
Used it against me,
Choking me up in my words.
Tears streaming down my face as I reminisce about the life I once had.
The life I so badly want back.
The months of pain I finally adjusted to, just for you to remind me I’m broken
The friendships you took from me, just to give them back, and make others more painful again.
You take away my feelings, then give them back when I would rather do without.
Can I have my life back?
How much asking do I have to do for you to hear me?
What more do you want from me?
Eden Sanchez’s timeline
- November 2023
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16 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- November 2022
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18 FriReceived a critique
on Can I have my life back from @Rosewood Apothecary
"Are we talking about a relationship with a person or are we talking about depression or mental illness? This really can be applied to both but either way the tone is pretty desperate and so I’ve got to ask, are you OK?…" -
17 ThuReceived a critique
on I fell apart but I survived from @Geezer
"I agree with Rosewood, and I'm glad that I got called out for it. Forgive my impulsive nature. After reading this again, I went and followed your example and wrote in very similar style. I don't know where my head was…" -
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17 ThuReceived a critique
on I fell apart but I survived from @Candlewitch
"welcome to Neopoet, it is nice to meet you. your poem takes me back to a really bad breakup a long time ago. I found that the best way to deal with all that pain, anger, and recriminations was to write it all out. there…" -
16 WedReceived a critique
on I fell apart but I survived from @Lavender
"Greetings, Eden, I feel the hurt and sorrow here, on the edge of exasperation. I can appreciate the process of a broken heart healing, and your theme throughout fits that process. I think your title is ok, but the overa…" -
16 WedReceived a critique
on I fell apart but I survived from @Rosewood Apothecary
"Let me say first that your outward vulnerability makes for a very captivating poem. I like the series of questions that lead to expressions of anger right before you start making affirmations. You will not be broken for…" -
16 WedReceived a critique
on I fell apart but I survived from @Geezer
"Actually, I think it's really prose but for the time being we will consider it poetry. A good story, I knew the ending, but your writing kept me hostage until the end of it. A really great introspective write. In the en…" -
16 WedReceived a critique
on I fell apart but I survived from @Jackweb
"A very sad poem! Emotionally touching...The whole lines is full of pain, regret and melancholy. There are complications in a romantic relationships. Falling out of love. A relationship without love is meaningless! ." -
16 WedFirst publication
I fell apart but I survived
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About Me
About me
I’m 18 years old. I write about pains I’ve experienced that I hope no one can relate to but sympathize to those that do.
Location: USA
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