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fluffykona10
Member since July 2, 2022
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Trust me
My eyes glaze
Looking straight through the haze
Surrounding your face
Most people avoid
What doesn’t bring them joy
So they stay wrapped in tin foil
For the rest of they’re days
But I see through
I see you
In your room
With a knife
Wondering why life
Has so much strife
A little more can’t hurt
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But it isn’t worth
Seeing the blood squirt
Think to your future, your past
The pain won’t last
The squirt
Of that blood can’t be worth
The hurt
It causes later, the strife
In your life
Won’t stop with that knife
The world is bigger than your room
And you
Are strong so push through
These rough days
Foil
The bad and bring joy
Into your life but never avoid
My face
Get out of the haze
And don’t glaze
The truth in sugar
It doesn’t work
Trust me
fluffykona10’s timeline
- December 2024
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30 Mon
- July 2023
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02 SunAnniversary
One year of membership
- March 2023
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23 ThuReceived a critique
on everything's gone from @Jackweb
"This is a stunning piece! The rhetorical question makes a point and is very effective in hooking a reader's interest and making them think about their own response to the question in hand. If I had written this, I would…" -
19 SunReceived a critique
on everything's gone from @Psyve
"This is a very dark piece overall, but i loved it. Read through it a couple of times. There is some amazing imagery here, such as in the lines: and your dreams of a better world come crashing back to a dying earth fille…" -
19 Sun
- August 2022
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15 MonReceived a critique
on What Life Means to Me from @Jackweb
"This line captured my attention: 'life is a picture in your head of a distorted reality' It seems you are deeply in thought, ruminating about the reality of life. This type of poem would have echoed out if it was punctu…" -
15 Mon
- July 2022
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09 SatReceived a critique
on Life and Death from @Candlewitch
"I agree with Geezer. I think we live our own lives, so too, must we die our own personal deaths (maybe good, maybe bad and could be mediocre.) I like your poem and the speculation. also it is your favor that you don't p…" -
09 SatCritiqued
"Blizzard" by @One
"Very clever of you. I'm sorry if I interfered with your style, I'm glad you tried to do your own thing. I myself can be a little OCD about rhymes, especially in my own poems. The fact that you were able to write a non-r…" -
08 FriReceived a critique
on Life and Death from @RoseBlack
"Overall, this was a good write. You took a controversial topic and presented your thoughts and beliefs in an organized, dignified way. My belief is that simply being one religion doesn't designate your final journey or…" -
06 WedReceived a critique
on Life and Death from @Rosewood Apothecary
"I’m the god of my own universe. The DMT my body is making and saving for the death experience should provide me with some comforting hallucinations as I transition into oblivion. The piece is good. Excellent meter but c…" -
06 WedReceived a critique
on Life and Death from @Jackweb
"Everyone have spoken well here. Truly I believe your word here: 'For death is a mystery, and it does not give us splendour'. When we put off the mortal coil we go for the next which we all do not know what await us. God…" -
06 WedReceived a critique
on Life and Death from @One
"a good strong poem that makes the reader question their own beliefs. Personally I don't think any religion has the answer. Most religions are based on the same themes just with different deities & rituals. Maybe we don'…" -
05 TueCritiqued
"Blizzard" by @One
"I think the fear of reality was so real I was shivering just reading this! My one comment would be that you started rhyming in the beginning, and then stopped. If this was because you found it challenging to find a rhym…" -
05 Tue
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02 SatCritiqued
"Too Deep..." by @Candlewitch
"There is a depth to this poem that resonates deeply, in that you make me feel for these people. This work has a perfect balance of sympathy, pain, and the truth of how someone might feel. There is nothing you could chan…" -
02 SatFirst critique offered
on "Too Deep..." (since unpublished) by @Candlewitch
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02 SatFirst publication
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02 SatJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
About me
I used to mostly write about nature, going on walks through a forest and writing about what I saw. More recently, I've been writing about more profound things like life as a whole and the workings of society. I needed a place to share my work.
Location: B.C. Canada, CAN
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Trust me
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everything's gone
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What Life Means to Me
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Life and Death
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