Snipes

Member since February 24, 2019

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To learn me

Posted May 5, 2019 · 14 lines · 1 critiques

My life so lonely my eyes just wanna close
Only myself to blame for these paths I chose
Never ask for anything never heard me complain
I walked through the fires I still feel the pain
I except you Lord in Jesus name
New life already beginning to unfold
The past is gonna just be a story never told
New start without even a single dime
Nobody can put shade over my new shine
Realizing now life is just training course for what's to come
Time I stop hurting myself and smile stop being so numb
My worst enemy was only just me now I see
Forgive all for everything including me now Im finally alive an free
What a battle to simply learn me

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May 2019
07 Tue

Received a critique
on To learn me from @Geezer
"It's [accept] not except. Watch your tenses, when you say "I chose", you have to speak in the past tense,; which makes the word you describe as being in the past. [These, is present tense]. Your rhythm is kind of ragged…"
05 Sun

Posted a poem
To learn me
"My life so lonely my eyes just wanna close"
Open thread 14 lines
March 2019
01 Fri

Received a critique
on HERE I LAY from @Eumolpus
"is musical, it needs a pace, a metronome, otherwise it sounds like the orchestra warming up. You can do DA-ta DA-ta DA-ta or da-TA da TA da-TA but the stress has to be somewhat consistent. I think you can that from the…"
01 Fri

Received a critique
on HERE I LAY from @Geezer
"first timer, you have done really well. As a rhymer, I like what you have done with it. I agree, that you might try and make the lines a little more rhythmic. The critique we give here is only to help you become a bette…"
February 2019
24 Sun

First publication
HERE I LAY
24 Sun

Posted a poem
HERE I LAY
"Here I lay with my eyes so Bright and wide"
Open thread 10 lines
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About me

brand new to poetry thought I'd have a stop to look see
Hoping I may of found a sight with truly no fee

Snipes

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