Temporal Fugue

Member since November 18, 2019

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Sheeple

Posted Nov 18, 2019 · 10 lines · 7 critiques

They swarm all around me, I've given up the count
Far too many to be seen, too many, to surmount

It's a mob mentality, a furious, greater fail
A serious abnormality, a ship, that cannot sail

Moving so lethargically, pausing every stride
Overthinking typically, tourists with no guide

Way too needy, a snowflake in the heat
not mentally that speedy, fast, or ever fleet

What can be said of scion's, what they dream of, while asleep
Strive to be a lion, struggle not to be a sheep

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Received a critique
on Sheeple from @Eumolpus
"Obviously concerning what poetry is you “get it” and have crafted a good poem. Welcome The great title is perfect. I would suggest it’s used in the last couplet rather than sheep. Sheeple rhyming with people, steeple, e…"
19 Tue

Received a critique
on Sheeple from @Tonya
"I hope that it is mere coincidence if I fall in with the sheep! I like the poem! I enjoyed the rhythm and message. However, I thought the crowd, sheep, mob..these are all plural. When we read to the snowflake line...sho…"
18 Mon

Received a critique
on Sheeple from @Geezer
"I wanted to comment on your poem. I like the rhythm of this one! I rhyme lots and I love this kind of pattern, but if you read the fourth line from the bottom out loud, you will find that you need another two beats to m…"
18 Mon

Received a critique
on Sheeple from @Geezer
"just lions and sheep are sheep. We can't all be lions or there would be nothing to eat! ~ Geezer. ."
18 Mon

Critiqued
"Falling" by @Defygravity
"Hahah! All too true DF! :D Words pieced and placed, so perfectly as poetry embraced"
18 Mon

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on "Falling" by @Defygravity
18 Mon

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Sheeple
18 Mon

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Sheeple
"They swarm all around me, I've given up the count"
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A moment in time
rhythm, and rhyme

Location: Texas, USA

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William Ernest Henley

Emily Dickenson

Arthur Guiterman

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Posted: 18 November, 2019

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"Falling" by @Defygravity

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