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Tawny023
Member since June 26, 2023
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Time has a Tomorrow
Are we that self-absorbed?
We think death
has no tomorrow.
Did we create Earth?
Hold time in our palm
or even wipe our noses
as babes?
Tomorrow will come
whether six feet above
or six down under.
The watch did
not depart us
or miss a single tick.
Perhaps it
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took a
deep breath,
feeling lighter—
until a new mother
hears the first
cries of their newborn.
Time is a
self-serving
myopic master
pressing forever forward.
It gives us
a perimeter of context
in which we mark life:
before death,
after death,
Man or god,
Friend or foe,
each has its own time.
Death comes
everyday.
A passing wind,
through the cracks
of our mortality.
Drifts daily
in and out,
until finally it
shuts the door.
But there is
a lock and the
key exists,
where souls gather—
Where time opens
its hands to cradle
its seeds.
Tawny023’s timeline
- November 2025
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14 FriNew follower
@Geezer
- April 2025
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30 WedReceived a critique
on Time has a Tomorrow from @Lavender
"Hello, Tawny, Lots here to help us remember just who we are in the scheme of life. I very much like your title. I, too, wondered if you meant mortality - it goes along with the feel and theme of the poem. Nice entry for…" -
30 WedReceived a critique
on Time has a Tomorrow from @Geezer
"that you can do without the second stanza, I feel that is addressed by way of the preceding lines and the way they transition into the next stanza smoothly. I would try: The watch did not hesitate or miss a single tick…" -
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- December 2024
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28 SatReceived a critique
on Punishment fit for the naughty from @Jackweb
"Conclusion: The poem "Punishment fit for the naughty" is a humorous and lighthearted exploration of the consequences of being naughty, set in a festive holiday context. The speaker, seemingly a authority figure, deliber…" -
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21 SatReceived a critique
on I can’t call it from @Clentin
"It seems they have you on their______mind! Good poem, consise" -
20 FriCritiqued
"Below my heart " by @Anna Severchuk
"A great contender and a solid rhyme scheme. Good luck and nice read." -
17 TueReceived a critique
on Mr. And Mrs. Claus Big Dilemma from @Lavender
"Hello, Tawny, This is a fun and unique concept here! But I had to read it several times to distinguish who was saying what to whom. Maybe there is a clearer way to let the reader realize who is speaking at which time? A…" -
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10 TueReceived a critique
on I can’t call it from @Rula
"I thought this is clever and crisp. Good one. Thank you for sharing! Best wishes. (Butt) should be {but}?" -
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- November 2024
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26 TueReceived a critique
on Tulips of love from @Candlewitch
"such lovely thoughts. You have expressed them very well! my favorite line is: Curious yet Courageous nicely done! best wishes, Cat" -
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05 TueCritiqued
"Spark to Embers (Wildflowers II)" by @Candlewitch
"A very real depiction of love and sometimes our lovers are the people we admire most. Always remember you are strong, brilliant, and wonderful too and they are the line but you are the one pulling the rope. It’s a bless…" -
05 TueCritiqued
"Hope" by @Anna Severchuk
"I really enjoyed this hopeful and almost like a beacon of light through the darkness. Very inspirational and nicely done." - October 2024
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- September 2024
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20 FriCritiqued
"I Can Hardly Wait" by @Kelly Ann Wilson
"I enjoyed how you crafted this poem and the bringing foreshadowing the fall as the leaves have already symbolically caught fire and I am excited about the fall but I am not sure why? And I am not sure if that’s a bad or…" -
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14 SatCritiqued
" Life in Short" by @Rula
"I enjoyed this poem duality and my favorite line Long is the journey, and sacred Although life is hard it is sacred And you leave the reader with a hopeful message to continue living." -
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"Welcome Home" by @paleoray
"The ultimate prayer is to be righteous in God’s eye My favorite line: all I know is praising has begun , because after reading this poem all I can do is give praise to you the poet for a job well done. Thank you for all…" -
14 SatCritiqued
"Bulls Versus a China Figure" by @Punkyfrewster
"Through reading this well crafted poem I was thinking of names like Bully the bull and Chyna the china figurine, which is a testimony to how invested I was in reading about animal and a thing. I totally was captured by…" -
14 SatCritiqued
"THE BULLY" by @Twizzle48
"This poem definitely packed a punch and the lines Not long before one might snap And react with more than a slap We’re both clever and hard hitting. Great entry and I look forward to reading more." -
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26 WedAnniversary
One year of membership
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@Clentin
- October 2023
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@William Lynn
- July 2023
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15 SatHighest posting month
July 2023 — 5 poems
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14 FriFirst critique offered
on "Overthinking " by @Pat Raia
- June 2023
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27 TueFirst publication
Mockingbirds and Rainbows
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26 MonJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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Mother Nature is sacred
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Pet of Preference
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Tulips of love
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Reflections of a Bully
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First of many bike rides
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Mr. Barman
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Passed by her hero
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Full of the saloon
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The last ride outside the city
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| Earn A Poem Workshop 2 | (syllabus) | Olympic Pool | Started 2023-11-16 | Closed to new participants (and underway) |