spydurpoet

Member since June 21, 2011

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Pathetic

Posted Jul 25, 2011 · 45 lines · 2 critiques

I considered writing my suicide note today,
just to give it to you and see the look on your face.
I already know, though, so it seems all rather
pointless.

You'd give me that huge-eyed rage look
that I am getting all too familiar with,
and tell me that I am being stupid,
that you're not going to put up with it
anymore.

Of course,
you'd be right...about my stupidity.
But sometimes I just don't know
how to get through to you.

I hold my tongue.

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Somehow, still, we seem to manage
to get into a dispute about one thing
or another.

Pathetic.

I keep trying to not care
when you say something that stings my heart,
or when you poke fun of me...
reminding me that even in love
I do not fit in.

It never quite works out that way, though,
and I end up crying,
hoping for some comfort from you
that never comes.

I can't turn to my friends.
I can't stand people who air their laundry
to every single person they know.
Post every argument
on their FaceBook status.

It seems pathetic.

But it's welling up inside,
and tears are not enough
to release the overflow
anymore.

I smiled at you,
hoping you wouldn't ask what was wrong,
because I always fall for that
thinking that you actually care,
that you'll be sensitive and kind
instead of acting like emotions are
a personal offense toward you.

Like I'm just pathetic.

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July 2011
26 Tue

Received a critique
on Pathetic from @Candlewitch
"I am very much hoping that this poem is not a suicide note. If it is just a poem, then it is very effective. And please forgive me for jumping to conclusions. If this is a suicide note, then please don't do it. Find som…"
25 Mon

Posted a poem
Pathetic
"I considered writing my suicide note today,"
Open thread 45 lines
19 Tue

Received a critique
on Forgetting Mystery from @Candlewitch
"Nice to meet you! Your poem reflects many issues of today. My favorite lines are: Individuality is being mass produced, while the cotton fields are burning and the wildlife is losing ground. I woke up lost in familiarit…"
18 Mon

New follower
@loved
18 Mon

Critiqued
"Moon for Sale" by @loved
"One could easily take offense to this catergorization of a nation, but we all do it, I suppose, to one nation or another. Thanks for sharing! ~*~jessi"
18 Mon

Critiqued
"The Nest Is Empty..." by @Geezer
"This was powerful and emotional. I loved reading it, even as it made me sad. The only thing was the last stanza completely threw me off with the change of rhyme! I felt kind of cheated. But still, amazing poem! ~*~jessi"
18 Mon

Critiqued
"POISONED WELLS: re-writes" by @Geremia
"I adore the imagery in this. Dark. I particluarly loved the first two lines of the last stanza. Great job! ~*~jessi p.s. you may wish to change eshoes to echoes. ;)"
18 Mon

Critiqued
"To Sleep" by @yenti
"My first impression was oh my goodness, can I even finish this before my break is over?! :) Just kidding. This was amazing. Being obsessed with dreams as I am, I adored the return to dreams throughout this. Yuo did a fa…"
09 Sat

Received a critique
on Tentative Dreaming from @CCfire
"Jess I truly like some of the metaphors in this, I think some filler words can go :) The first part is as follows as I would have read it. burn red like a sunset bled on paler skies burnt orange metaphor, flame in my po…"
09 Sat

Received a critique
on Tentative Dreaming from @CCfire
"Jess I truly like some of the metaphors in this, I think some filler words can go :) The first part is as follows as I would have read it. burn red like a sunset bled on paler skies burnt orange metaphor, flame in my po…"
09 Sat

Received a critique
on Forgetting Mystery from @CCfire
"Jess it's a thoughful piece on what we humans do in stripping the earth bare, the first stanza could use some work but I see Chrys has mentioned 'constructing' rather than construction...The first stanza I think needs t…"
08 Fri

Posted a poem
Forgetting Mystery
"They are painting buildings,"
Open thread 20 lines
04 Mon

Received a critique
on Sepia Skies from @weirdelf
"And you have had some good feedback amongst the in-fighting, sorry about that, it reflects badly on all of us. The poem lacks prosodic values. It feels like words piled together. May I suggest you read some Gerard Manle…"
04 Mon

Received a critique
on Sepia Skies from @pleiades
"i've read this poem 5 times now, and am still no closer to an articulate review! while i understand what is being said, and think there are some wonderfully poetic lines, my overall impression is that the majority of it…"
03 Sun

New follower
@CCfire
03 Sun

Received a critique
on Sepia Skies from @CCfire
"lol No Jess, even raw can be polite, there are ways to do it without making you feel small and there was no need to do that at all and please don't delete this as it will serve as evidence :) xxx"
June 2011
30 Thu

Posted a poem
Tentative Dreaming
"burn it red like a sunset bled on paler skies"
Open thread 18 lines
27 Mon

Posted a poem
Become Yesterday
"It feels like yesterday already,"
Open thread 16 lines
26 Sun

Posted a poem
Like Trees
"We sway like leaves in the wind,"
Open thread 8 lines
24 Fri

Critiqued
"sleeping with a medici" by @CCfire
"This was strong. In fact, it felt, in reading, like unsuspectingly drinking a very strong, very old cup of coffee in anticipation of possibly a minor burn, but instead getting a scorching of rancid. Which is why I so lo…"
24 Fri

Critiqued
"The Price of Eternal Sleep" by @kaligantsaros
"Whoa, not wow, but wow as well. I adore this."
24 Fri

Critiqued
"The Mulberried Night" by @kaligantsaros
"Although, like the English, ha, the language seemed quite pretentious, you used it in a way that I do believe portrayed powerful emotion. I've come to learn that people we sensitive types consider cold and clinical find…"
24 Fri

First critique offered
on "The Mulberried Night" (since unpublished) by @kaligantsaros
24 Fri

First publication
Sepia Skies
24 Fri

Most-discussed work
Sepia Skies

11 critiques to date.
24 Fri

Posted a poem
Sepia Skies
"send me away to where there's"
Open thread 32 lines
21 Tue

Joined Neopoet
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First poem published 3 days later.

About Me

About me

I am happily in love with John M. Burchett who is now a Sr.!
I have two beautiful sons, Nicholas and John (Jr.).
I live in Texas.
I grew up in Maine.
I was in a bad car wreck in March 2009, broke all kinds of things.

Location: USA

Favorite Poets

David Jon Martin - Author of The Chicken on My Head (a collection of poetry) and Eeedgar The Elephant Who Exaggerated (a children's poem/picture book)

Frank DeF - follow him on FaceBook - Frank DeFulgentis

Henry Rollins - what is not to love about that man?

Robert Frost - a (dead) man after my own heart

Natasha Degready - follow her at AllPoetry under the name Poetic Tasha - she is always claiming writer's block

but when it comes out it is worth the wait.

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on Pathetic from @Candlewitch

on Forgetting Mystery from @Candlewitch

"Moon for Sale" by @loved

"The Nest Is Empty..." by @Geezer

"POISONED WELLS: re-writes" by @Geremia

"To Sleep" by @yenti

on Tentative Dreaming from @CCfire

on Tentative Dreaming from @CCfire

on Forgetting Mystery from @CCfire

on Sepia Skies from @weirdelf

on Sepia Skies from @pleiades

on Sepia Skies from @CCfire

"sleeping with a medici" by @CCfire

"The Price of Eternal Sleep" by @kaligantsaros

"The Mulberried Night" by @kaligantsaros

on "The Mulberried Night" (since unpublished) by @kaligantsaros

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