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Sommer Lyn
Member since August 25, 2016
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Canterbury Melt.
Fancy a folie à deux?
A flight abandoned in winter’s
piss-poked snow-dimples,
and the frosted glasses
of small town hovels.
Hemmed in by the fangs-
dazzling deflectors for the flare
and trees;
A hanging, prismatic prison
glinting malevolently.
Melt me, please!
Emblazon me like a golden
ethereal dew
molten on the leaves
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and falling free.
Boughs breaking -
Mutinous fractures
echo in the frozen vacuum
of a crisp, acoustic
wilderness.
Slipping sidewise,
Flexible in flux
I liquefy the perimeters,
And dissolve into splinters
every winter.
Sommer Lyn’s timeline
- August 2021
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25 WedAnniversary
5 years of membership
- August 2017
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25 FriAnniversary
One year of membership
- July 2017
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16 SunReceived a critique
on Breakwater. from @weirdelf
"and I finally figured out why, apart from its disturbing content, kind of used to that. I've been on a reading jag and when I came to read it it was hard to do. Poetry is always aloud for me so even though I hadn't voca…" - December 2016
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27 TueReceived a critique
on Backwoods Haunt. from @themoonman
"damn, this is such a fine line between abstract, surreal and utter stark reality ... all I can say is damn I loved it." -
25 SunCritiqued
"windbruise" by @Esker
"Some really toothsome images, contrasts and combinations in here - as torrid as an ornery winter gale, too." -
25 SunReceived a critique
on Backwoods Haunt. from @Esker
"delicious candy for the mind melting under the tongue of a visages walk Thousand Mile examinations drift with the dog in the dark an excitement in her step the cold finding the loose place of the buttoned Wrangler chris…" -
01 ThuCritiqued
"C O Y O T E G D O T " by @Esker
"p.s - that album with the circus performers is Strange Days. A brilliant album, and one of my favourite Doors works." -
01 Thu
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01 ThuCritiqued
"C O Y O T E G D O T " by @Esker
"I have been absolutely obsessed with Morrison since I was about 8 years old, for years I was intent on following his every footstep. Only I must have rolled my ankle at some point and not made it back on to the path; be…" - November 2016
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30 WedCritiqued
"C O Y O T E G D O T " by @Esker
""drop the dot stay up till Dawn Warmed by the full gloss smiles" More Eskerly beauty, and almost Jim Morrisonesque who got beat generation'd on the head." -
29 TueReceived a critique
on Canterbury Melt. from @themoonman
"I found this delightful to read, and read it again out loud. Then I went back and read more of your poetry ... damn, you are good. Thanks for sharing with us, Richard" -
27 SunReceived a critique
on Canterbury Melt. from @Geezer
"that you could just reverse the two words and still have the same effect and it will not have the "cliché" feel. Writing your name in the snow, and trying to maintain a holiday feel. I can see that. Even if I didn't get…" -
27 SunReceived a critique
on Canterbury Melt. from @Esker
""boughs broken" for some reason.I think of ribbon xmas..the cold waste winds blowing before boxing day pick up material fracturing in the minus weather like candy cane and toffee colorful crumble People read me and Like…" -
27 SunReceived a critique
on Canterbury Melt. from @Obadiah Grey
"Wonderful use of language, If I were to be pedantic - I'd replace the "boughs breaking" line, its a little too over used a phrase, and perhaps, the last two are the weakest. well worth coming back to. Obi." -
27 Sun
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07 MonReceived a critique
on A Springtide. from @Simon Smythe
"totally mirrored my haunt in the best possible way. And it's only 10:29am" -
07 MonNew follower
@Simon Smythe
- October 2016
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- September 2016
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29 Thu
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26 MonCritiqued
" Plantation of Roses" by @lovedly
"Ah, ok. Thank you for clearing that up, Lovedly. May I suggest that perhaps you use the word, and not the text-speak abbreviation of it. It shows the poem, and the forum you posted it in, much more respect and gives you…" -
26 MonCritiqued
" Plantation of Roses" by @lovedly
"What are 'gfs'? This has some raw material that can be worked into a piece of poetry, but you'd need to get out your chisel and hammer first. Maybe I just have no idea what you're trying to say here.. I apologise." -
25 SunNew follower
@Sparrow
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24 Sat
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14 WedNew follower
@Esker
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11 SunFirst critique offered
on "sitty Lair" by @Esker
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10 SatFirst publication
Moulting. (since unpublished)
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08 ThuNew follower
@weirdelf
- August 2016
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25 ThuJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 16 days later.
About Me
About me
South pacific flotsam, and literary jetsam.
Location: Auckland, New Zealand., NZL
Favorite Poets
Sylvia Plath
Rainer Rilke
Charles Bukowski
John Keats
William Blake
Emily Dickinson
George Gordon Byron
Robert Frost
William Shakespeare
Allen Ginsberg
William Burroughs
W.B Yeats
Arthur Rimbaud....
Are just some off the top of my head...
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