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Orange Sky
Orange sky,
That wicked red that burns against all life,
Scorching that soul in our eyes,
And driving all men mad,
All sane notions cast into the sea,
Happiness left to fizzle,
And fade,
Into that haze,
Orange sky,
That leaves me wanting your embrace,
Leaves me to cry,
Pray,
Rage,
And Drown in my faith,
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That orange sky,
Which wraps around the mountains,
Teaches all that life forgot,
Tortures me with all its might,
And leaves me all alone in July,
Orange sky,
Leaves me with a heartache,
Leaves me to rage,
That lovely orange sky,
Who doesn’t say goodbye,
Leaves no trace,
I’ll miss you in the night,
And wait for you in the morning,
To fill me once more with life.
Search’s timeline
- December 2021
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04 SatAnniversary
10 years of membership
- July 2017
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22 SatReceived a critique
on Orange Sky from @Pugilist
"With the exception of the last line of stanza three, aside from preferring a few periods in the first three stanzas, I believe you have a solid piece of work. The last line, "And leaves me all alone in July," is unfocus…" -
17 Mon
- June 2017
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28 WedCritiqued
"Beasts of burden " by @vandiemenspeak
"Nice one here man. A strange imagery occurs, the emotions conjure up my own memories, and I can relate to certain parts of it. So the contents there and all good. You're right about the formatting, there's a clear flow…" - April 2017
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25 TueReceived a critique
on From the Soil from @weirdelf
""I heard the hellfire roar A scourge of hatred A vicious plot" Primitive anthropomorphism. The rest is good, the resilience of life." -
25 Tue
- December 2016
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04 SunAnniversary
5 years of membership
- August 2016
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26 FriCritiqued
"Steel Your Will" by @alidzain
"Great read here. I'm all to familiar with emotions of the poem. I have faced and am still facing people who are trying to put me down and pray for my downfall, because they don't want to be alone in the mud pile of a li…" -
25 ThuReceived a critique
on We and our Mountains from @Vivovon
"The good old days, we always say so. A long history and civilization only the mountains can remember well. Armenia civilization has deep roots in antiquity. It is always a painful event when one has to leave the ancient…" -
24 WedReceived a critique
on We and our Mountains from @jane210660
"A beautiful nugget of nostalgia. Has a haunting air about it, without being too melancholy. I like the repetition of words, I think it works well. Jx" -
24 Wed
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12 FriReceived a critique
on Love Leaves at Midnight from @Vivovon
"Sounds very scary to me. Getting married!?" -
12 FriReceived a critique
on Love Leaves at Midnight from @Sparrow
"You have the bones of a poem no matter if it is fact or fiction, now the words are there it needs a touch of hard rhyme and flow. Try not to make a statement of the write, so it may hurt lots if true but fix the flow. P…" -
11 ThuReceived a critique
on Love Leaves at Midnight from @Race_9togo
"I would have preferred not to see the word "love", but then (heehee) it aint a love poem now, is it? I would definitely leave off the "of love" in the last line - more impact that way. Good to read your work; its been a…" -
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- June 2016
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27 Mon
- March 2015
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22 SunReceived a critique
on Foreign Girls from @Lenny of Cohen
"..............of nights out in the 1980's, and it was a scene I never felt comfortable in, so I stopped going altogether. I enjoyed this read, thanks for helping me return to my 20's. Namaste, Lenny" -
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- October 2014
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15 WedCritiqued
"gorgeous................." by @Esker
"I was experiencing my weekly poetic surge, and came on the site to read THIS! I think it was quite appropriate that I was in this strange specific mindset that I cannot explain. But reading this was wild and perfect , a…" - September 2014
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13 Sat
- August 2014
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14 ThuCritiqued
"Deaf, Blind, and Mute (edited)" by @Rula
"For me, I guess it was subtle. I had to go back and read it over a few times after you mentioned the form change. But that's just me and my experience, maybe other people are able to spot the change better than I. Great…" -
14 ThuCritiqued
"Deaf, Blind, and Mute (edited)" by @Rula
"Great stuff. Indeed there are times were it is better to be deaf, blind, or mute. To be pure and unable to be tainted by certain horrors. Liked it a lot. Noticed you were asking if you should change the "we(s)" to "I(s)…" -
14 ThuCritiqued
"FHALLION" by @Esker
"A chain of rambling thoughts. A circle that seems to keep breaking, all the while giving me a blast of truth each time. Be it a tale of love or a tale of getting back the time you lost. I don't care because it sounds al…" -
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- July 2014
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26 Sat
- June 2014
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12 ThuCritiqued
"S U B T E R F R U G A L " by @Esker
"Great stuff! It was all over the place and I can dig it. What I love about this one is that its kinda crazy, keeps changing and doesn't necessarily make a whole lot of sense from first reading it. But that's just the th…" -
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- December 2012
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04 TueAnniversary
One year of membership
- February 2012
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15 WedHighest posting month
February 2012 — 6 poems
- December 2011
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25 SunFirst critique offered
on "in the presence of joy " by @Seren
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04 SunFirst publication
The Dialogue
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04 SunJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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