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sanctus
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Another Friday Night
She sat inside her ice-cream life
and guessed the number of
bingo markers it might take
to win the jackpot.
Sometimes she questioned why
so many people drove her
crazy. Insulted her.
She divided her friends and lovers
into good and bad directions.
It was raining outside when
she began to cook the supper.
The stove was hot she was cold.
She was always cold in her house,
in her ice vein kitchen with
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the pretty white lace curtains
and the yellow-green walls.
Her problems could all be
isolated into one situation after
another. She light a cigarette.
Sitting at her table wondering
if she should cook rice or potatoes
with the meat. It didn't matter.
They'd wolf down the food
without a glance at her effort.
She found she was happier
when the kids were at school and
that man was at work doing whatever.
Impatience wasn't so much her statement
as was unconcern. So what,
she thought, as she dusted her ashes
into the ashtray.
Her memories could stretch so
far back, before this life even.
Yet she knew that what she knew
wasn't really very much at all.
Maybe he really loved her? Who knew?
For her it was only a situation.
She wondered if they'd remember
to take their shoes off at the door.
Her feelings could easily be hurt,
but on the other hand she often
neglected to express herself.
At half past five she'd put supper
on the table. They would sit around it.
Her family sharing the same table
and the same bathroom. Distance.
They were mutually ignorant of
each other.
She put out her cigarette, light another.
She wasn't afraid of cancer, just living.
Working man would be home soon,
right after the kids demanded home.
Sighing she stood up and pushed
the cat away with her foot, irritated.
Checked her purse. Bingo markers
neatly labelled. Another Friday night
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17 MonReceived a critique
on Another Friday Night from @Lonnie
"Lots of great imagery in this piece, and the theme is one that can never be over-done. All in all, an enjoyable read that neither disappoints, nor disenchants!" -
17 MonReceived a critique
on Another Friday Night from @Ian.T
"A slow waltz through the total boredom of reality to many home locked wives and Mothers:- just a couple of maybe's here.. She light a cigarette. She'd light She put out her cigarette, light another. Lighting another. Th…" -
17 MonReceived a critique
on Another Friday Night from @Esker
"the speed of this poem is very much what my experience on the reserve was like our bingo hall just a walk away although most drove...those with cars.. and the routine of life just completely flattens all the usual forma…" -
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06 MonReceived a critique
on I Might Demolish Every Whisper Ever Rumoured from @raj
"It is a unique write in free verse and I would agree with swamp witch on most points,,, it sustained my interest to the extent I read it more than once..." -
06 MonReceived a critique
on I Might Demolish Every Whisper Ever Rumoured from @weirdelf
"However I've learned to watch out for Pringle. I kind of hope he meant well... but, need I say more? You can always trust swamp-witch, one of the best informed, honest, talented and... ok, you get that picture too. Noth…" -
06 MonReceived a critique
on Times of Opening and Closing from @weirdelf
"and a remarkable debut for Neopoet. You are clearly a word-crafter after my own heart, even if it eludes most of my own work. I want to read this for you, partly for the sheer joy of saying the words out loud. http://vo…" - December 2013
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29 SunReceived a critique
on I Might Demolish Every Whisper Ever Rumoured from @billypringle
"This shows that you have a good vocabulary yet quite what your trying to say is another matter, Typical of beginners who begin to write poetry and I am assuming this with you - combined words and the sonic they create a…" -
28 SatReceived a critique
on I Might Demolish Every Whisper Ever Rumoured from @swamp-witch
"I really like the way you brought the title in at the very end of the poem. I also like the parallelism you use for the lines like "I might notice. I might not.", I might care. I might not", and so on. If I could make a…" -
26 ThuCritiqued
"The Dance of the Narcissus" by @billypringle
"you penned an awesome piece here..such a powerfully expressed write packed with heartfelt emotion...great stuff" -
26 ThuCritiqued
"The Dance of the Narcissus" by @billypringle
"you penned an awesome piece here..such a powerfully expressed write packed with heartfelt emotion...great stuff" -
25 WedCritiqued
"We Can't All Read Body Language (Through The Phone)" by @emogothgirl
"the depth to your words brings a real feel to it.....it delivers the feeling directly into the reader, giving them an inner reflection" -
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24 TueCritiqued
"The Uncomfortable Man" by @weirdelf
"This is a brilliant piece of writing. I love every element of it. A terrific commentary on society as it is and as it could be. Great work." -
24 TueCritiqued
"Bit by bit with passion" by @loved
"That is a really well crafted piece. The way that you approached this was exceptional" -
24 TueCritiqued
"Will you be mine" by @loved
"It was OK, but the obvious rhymes got on my nerves somewhat. i also found it a bit clichéd, to be honest with you." -
24 TueCritiqued
"Parallel dancing almost" by @loved
"That is a very deep and powerful sentiment that you have there. It is well crafted and well put together. Smooth read and great phrasing. Nice work" -
24 TueFirst critique offered
on "How many years" by @Ian.T
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23 MonFirst publication
Times of Opening and Closing
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23 MonJoined Neopoet
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