The Rain Sprite

Member since May 13, 2011

Member for 15 years

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Dandelions

Posted Mar 24, 2020 · 9 lines · 3 critiques

Bloom like the dandelions
Under the autumn veil.

Dance and be vibrant
Like the petals of the sun;
Soft and graceful
Like the wind.

Twirl and soar
Like a beguiling oriole,
Perching on a spring branch.

The Rain Sprite’s timeline

May 2026
13 Wed

Anniversary
15 years of membership
May 2021
13 Thu

Anniversary
10 years of membership
March 2020
25 Wed

Received a critique
on Dandelions from @Gracy
"Don't know why my name got in there. I have trouble moving up and down when commenting."
25 Wed

Received a critique
on Dandelions from @Gracy
"Hi, just some suggestions to take or toss. I think it shows more this way. Lovely poem, really enjoy the colours, the imagery. We're in Autumn in Argentine Patagonia, with a long winter ahead. Don't know when we'll be a…"
24 Tue

Received a critique
on Dandelions from @Eumolpus
"you have used language like music. above all, that is poetry. The last stanza is really wonderful. Just glides off the tongue. Just one comment- around me and I think most places, dandelions bloom in spring.... I'm not…"
24 Tue

Posted a poem
Dandelions
"Bloom like the dandelions"
Open thread 9 lines
January 2019
23 Wed

Received a critique
on Look Into Our Eyes from @weirdelf
"It is beautifully written and powerful. I can only guess that there is confusion over the word 'you'. Yes, really, we don't know if you are talking to god or an ex-lover. And that is a very serious confusion. I've done…"
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Voiceless from @weirdelf
"has someone saddened you beyond even profanity? My dear, I hope not. Say a rude word just to put my mind at rest, please."
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Voiceless from @weirdelf
"Was thinking of 'borrowing' a few myself, but should one not eat the seeds? They root you in melancholy? I hate gods and spirits, they're a nasty, spiteful bunch, but this is a very fine poem."
June 2018
09 Sat

Received a critique
on Tears from @raj
"Good one about Dew Rain Sprite.. ......................................................................"
09 Sat

Received a critique
on Tears from @raj
"After reading your thoughts about choosing "bitter" over "salt" I agree with you...makes lot of sense... I was wondering why you didn't write also add a stanza about "dew"…"
05 Tue

Posted a poem
Tears
"I"
Open thread 30 lines
05 Tue

Critiqued
"Changing Days" by @Sparrow
"I am still working on giving feedback. I am honestly not good at it. Hence, I read poems, but very seldom do I write a feedback. But the feedback below came from my heart after reading your work. I have no words to say…"
04 Mon

Critiqued
"Hailing Eventide" by @blistered-pen
"Eventide! What a beautiful word and when spoken seems to bring the beauty of sunset and the night. It seems so mystical and magical. I love that your work is full of colorful imageries. It is as the sky is but a blank c…"
March 2018
26 Mon

Critiqued
"An Abode for Sadness" by @alidzain
"Perhaps what accompanies Eternity is Solitude. Solitude is enslaved by loneliness and only Death can set it free And be with Eternity. There is this image of an aged man sitting on a rocking chair inside an old, desolat…"
25 Sun

Most-discussed work
A Letter to Emily

12 critiques to date.
25 Sun

Posted a poem
A Letter to Emily
"In her bedroom is her white dress,"
Open thread 33 lines
23 Fri

Posted a poem
Voiceless
"Her voice was like the Angel's melody"
Open thread 10 lines
21 Wed

Posted a poem
Look Into Our Eyes
"The golden light of the sunset"
Open thread 72 lines
June 2017
19 Mon

Posted a poem
Immortal Overlooking The World (Version II)
"Standing on a peak"
Open thread 65 lines
19 Mon

Posted a poem
Immortal Overlooking The World
"Standing on a peak"
Open thread 49 lines
April 2017
10 Mon

Posted a poem
Fervent Prayer Under The Dusk-Bathed Sky
"They say dusk is seperation"
Open thread 48 lines
04 Tue

Posted a poem
Song Under The Pavilion
"If you wish to know"
Open thread 26 lines
January 2017
20 Fri

Posted a poem
Nemo
"I am but a shadow"
Open thread 14 lines
06 Fri

Posted a poem
Remember Me
"Remember me like the sun"
Open thread 42 lines
06 Fri

Critiqued
"A quiet time" by @Sparrow
"Thanks for referring me to this! I see why! Full of imagery and I can "feel" the calmness and the steady flow of your poem. The words are well-chosen and they do not break the "melody" at all! The structure and the word…"
02 Mon

Posted a poem
Rain And The Woods
"When it rains,"
Open thread 20 lines
May 2016
13 Fri

Anniversary
5 years of membership
January 2013
02 Wed

Critiqued
"Insane Normality" by @Shamoneness
"Face the reality and live in the monochromatic flow of society. Wear black and white instead of red and blend in. But I like the image of seeing red amidst the grayness of normality. You sound like a rebel but that's th…"
02 Wed

First critique offered
on "Insane Normality" by @Shamoneness
May 2012
13 Sun

Anniversary
One year of membership
May 2011
13 Fri

First publication
Forever In My Heart
13 Fri

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 1 days later.

About Me

About me

"I'll tell you how the sun rose, -
A ribbon at a time."
- Emily Dickinson

Location: South Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets

I am inspired by poets who can depict the deeper depths of human emotions and soul. Simplicity captivates me as well. I have a special place in my heart for Oriental poems.