quillsveinback

Member since October 29, 2012

Member for 13 years, 7 months

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Crisp noon

Posted Sep 24, 2019 · 32 lines · 2 critiques

Dead Eskimo Rising

(for William Scott Home)

The yellow horizon grooves
in serrated ice light corks;
a milk crest tide meets
in an ivory ellipsis of broach
with shaped lobster crabs
arms crawling toward a
finely spun shadow pillars.

An eskimo’s face disperses
in a technicolor lake, that queue
of changing channels

Above the green ice fire
sounding a bullhorn

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Crusting blank quarters
in his eyes, pausing
to stare in midriff.

The tissue silk
pink and virgin
An orb eyed eskimo
drawing cursive rain mazes
on his flea bitten palm
bursting in the surface
of a single snow bitten letter

The lettuce head mannequins spin
with cauterized lego numbers;
this geode fever dream
rashes are spinning
wiping away our cursive breath
the misting alphabet of so much
much glass rain in memory’s
smoke laced vistas.

quillsveinback’s timeline

October 2022
29 Sat

Anniversary
10 years of membership
August 2020
08 Sat

Received a critique
on The Refrain from @Candlewitch
"you smack the reader in the face with the raw intensity of this poem! I love it! *hugs, Cat"
08 Sat

Received a critique
on The Refrain from @Geezer
"the tale of someone lost in the nightmare of insanity? All the clues seem to point that way. I'm not sure that the reader can make much of what seems to be a hidden theme here. Perhaps a clue in the last words? How to g…"
May 2020
20 Wed

Critiqued
"Live with Grace" by @lovedly
"of the more honest pieces I've read about this phenomenon. Most feel it is a purposeless thing, something that just popped out of the air. This poem traces a genesis, a sort of spiritual one."
October 2019
21 Mon

Received a critique
on Crisp noon from @lovedly
"but did not see you at a place any next time may be do read my poetry unique"
20 Sun

Critiqued
"Night" by @Basil-Collins
"has some of the real macabre about it: The circles dance in circus And the dolls had been ripped a rumble to silence While our skins are drawn tight across it's cheekbones As we expected the worse... gnashing the blood…"
05 Sat

Received a critique
on Crisp noon from @Sparrow 42
"I will try and read this again and make a proper comment , there is so much going on that makes it hard to follow. I will edit my comment later, but the write seems very good, Yours, Ian"
September 2019
24 Tue

Posted a poem
Crisp noon
"Dead Eskimo Rising"
Open thread 32 lines
August 2019
18 Sun

Received a critique
on Temple of the Doll from @zebra
"Some things I've been thinking about: What do you think of the notion of earning an image by connecting it with the concrete as opposed to creating it from the less-anchored transmission of the imagination? Is hyper ima…"
18 Sun

Received a critique
on Bloodletting In Singular from @zebra
"Its definitely mutual!!!!!! :)"
16 Fri

Received a critique
on Bloodletting In Singular from @weirdelf
"Copy and paste, and maybe with a few minor tweaks as to whom you are addressing in parts, repost it as a blog. Every poet needs to read this. You've inspired me. I'm not sure how to proceed. Part of me wants to get away…"
16 Fri

Received a critique
on Bloodletting In Singular from @zebra
"Understood: First of all who couldn't use a thorough incisive critique of their work with concrete examples for clarification, open intelligent discussions about context style etc but lets admit it is seriously demandin…"
15 Thu

Critiqued
"The Word" by @IRiz
"I always enjoy your poems; you seem to me singularly honest, particularly about your individuated plight in life. So many people like to cover it in gloss and nonsense; there is none of this with your work, which I hope…"
13 Tue

Posted a poem
Temple of the Doll
"I’ve seen the thing"
Open thread 35 lines
07 Wed

Posted a poem
The Distance of a Rose
"In the moon was a girl who played"
Open thread 37 lines
July 2019
25 Thu

Most-discussed work
Bloodletting In Singular

16 critiques to date.
25 Thu

Posted a poem
Bloodletting In Singular
"The barren, thirsty soil of this hill"
Open thread 15 lines
June 2019
12 Wed

Critiqued
"Herbie’s Trip" by @Bugstar
"good. Reminds me of one of James Tates' prose poems."
May 2019
31 Fri

Posted a poem
The Holly Fields, The Flutes
"The dead follow bliss with hound dog eyes."
Open thread 28 lines
27 Mon

Critiqued
"Finding A Druid (Selfie)" by @Cheryl de Rue
"The polite dead and carousels and the whole thing has some LSD invoked paintbrush reminds me of the film "Carnival of Souls". Like Cummings and Picasso smoking in the bushes and through the fumes heres the poem."
18 Sat

Critiqued
"Heaven Be" by @Cheryl de Rue
"has a painterly quality to it. What you're writing has a way of appearing. Excellent."
16 Thu

Posted a poem
The Breakfast Light (after the female characters in David Lynch's films)
"Blink, Alice Wakefield, Blink"
Open thread 37 lines
15 Wed

Critiqued
"Eyes With No Girl (with audio)" by @weirdelf
"One of the most viscerally unpleasant things I've ever read was "Pet Sematary". And that 1979 movie with the Supernosferatu, "Salem's Lot". He sort of liked it, I guess."
13 Mon

Critiqued
"Eyes With No Girl (with audio)" by @weirdelf
"is that absinthe played a role, but that's too perfect. This is velvety smooth jazz. It reminds me of David Park Barnitz's Danse Macabre---want decadence? Check that one out, free online"
April 2019
14 Sun

Posted a poem
Satin Galleys
"The mirror is dormant"
Open thread 22 lines
March 2019
28 Thu

Posted a poem
Sea Sick Moons
"During the lost hours of your dream seizure"
Open thread 10 lines
January 2019
15 Tue

Posted a poem
The Sower of Dream Wax
"I would be the sower of dreams,"
Open thread 8 lines
09 Wed

Posted a poem
The One Face That Reveals Them All
"This Town is Still Waiting"
Open thread 11 lines
December 2018
29 Sat

Posted a poem
A Prayer
"The dreampsalm echoed from her,"
Open thread 12 lines
16 Sun

New follower
@chevyvent
15 Sat

Posted a poem
The Invisible Cities New verssion
"The Invisible Cities"
Open thread 16 lines
November 2018
21 Wed

New follower
@zebra
October 2017
29 Sun

Anniversary
5 years of membership
November 2014
23 Sun

First critique offered
on "Space Turkey!" (since unpublished) by @Lenny of Cohen
15 Sat

Highest posting month
November 2014 — 5 poems
October 2013
29 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
November 2012
01 Thu

First publication
Elegy For Whom She May Have Been (since unpublished)
October 2012
29 Mon

Joined Neopoet
Membership begins

First poem published 2 days later.

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Location: Albany NY, USA

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Cellar Door	(syllabus)	Olympic Pool	Started 2019-03-27	Concluded

10 years of membership

on The Refrain from @Candlewitch

on The Refrain from @Geezer

"Live with Grace" by @lovedly

on Crisp noon from @lovedly

"Night" by @Basil-Collins

on Crisp noon from @Sparrow 42

on Temple of the Doll from @zebra

on Bloodletting In Singular from @zebra

on Bloodletting In Singular from @weirdelf

on Bloodletting In Singular from @zebra

"The Word" by @IRiz

"Herbie’s Trip" by @Bugstar

"Finding A Druid (Selfie)" by @Cheryl de Rue

"Heaven Be" by @Cheryl de Rue

"Eyes With No Girl (with audio)" by @weirdelf

"Eyes With No Girl (with audio)" by @weirdelf

5 years of membership

on "Space Turkey!" (since unpublished) by @Lenny of Cohen

November 2014 — 5 poems

One year of membership

Elegy For Whom She May Have Been (since unpublished)

Membership begins

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