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Pryderi Duntz.
Member since November 30, 2022
Member for 3 years, 6 months
My First Journey Ever
There is nothing herein which should be interpreted as a statement that the subject possesses prior cognisance
of the surroundings or situation described.
This First Ever Journey.
This is the point,
the point of no return.
The unassailable drawbridge
finally came down.
Now we go in en-mass.
The time being right,
we carry the hopes and dreams
along the way.
We carry them with us.
We carry them for others, too.
This was not only a leap of faith for them.
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We too, have to have a degree
of faith in our own ability.
We are more than simple messengers.
We bring the gift of our whole selves.
We are the spearheaded
who carry along with us,
our future as yet, still furled.
Each of us, in these moments
are Athleticism Aquarius.
We are swimming for our lives,
indeed for everyones invested interest.
One of us, blind as we presemtly are,
will be triumphant, eventually.
For now the journey is slowing.
For me, it is as though I have
become embedded in a wall.
A soft cellular wall.
And overcome
I feel compelled to rest here for a while.
This is the test of the millions.
Mostly we are fit and well.
We all know our goal.
Some sports, egg others onward.
I will stay here for a while.
It is out of my hands.
Sooner than later,
I am back in the swim.
We are all in concert.
Some of us are brotherly,
others of us sisterly,
and what ever the outcome,
we are most certainly family.
Though we are
only one half of the puzzle,
together we advance
with a common hope.
All of us have the knowledge of the lock.
This is key to whoever it is
who makes the winning move.
Now the end comes into sight.
Though there is no sense
of a finishing line.
There is among us
a strong shared sense of purpose.
Each of us knows why we are here.
Each one of the group,
though as yet incomplete,
have the drive to achieve wholeness.
For now the limited life we have
is not enough.
This fact has come to realisation
with the sighting of the prize.
We each seek
the prize for a shared reason,
that being a need for an opportunity
to attain uniqueness of life, as a person.
To be a Gem in the Universe.
And so here I am.
I surge to complete my plunge.
I have all the information I need
to become complete.
Success is all about
making an effective entry.
This is it, my planned impact.
I am now living as an insider.
I have successfully
traversed the singularity
of the then, to now.
We are one.
Now the great changes may begin.
All we need now is a little time
for things to progress.
The outcome we hope for
is to become me.
Life is more than being
a staged union of X’s and Y’s.
But this is a start.
When it is time for me to return,
back the way I came,
then this phase will be over.
The winner will emerge.
Then the love truly begins.
In this regard
we are all winners by birth.
Pryderi ap Duntz.
07/02/23. Devon. England.
Pryderi Duntz.’s timeline
- November 2023
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30 ThuAnniversary
One year of membership
- February 2023
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08 WedReceived a critique
on My First Journey Ever from @Rosewood Apothecary
"The language is great. Give it another read through, you have a few obvious typos. I would rearrange the lines for better delivery. It feels like it needs to breathe more. I can help with that if you’d like. Tim" -
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"I examined this piece from a number of angles and conclude that it is applicable from many points of view, so becomes a whirlwind of thought-inducing paradigms. The title resets the process over each time. At least that…" - January 2023
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- December 2022
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26 MonReceived a critique
on And As Of Now from @Candlewitch
"strong statements stated here. I like what you have done with this piece. just one suggestion: remove all of the "ands" it doesn't need them. read it out loud and you will se the difference. otherwise it is very good wo…" -
23 FriReceived a critique
on Happy New Future from @Geezer
"message! Your title is very good and describes the message perfectly. I just question the use of capitals in the words, unaffected and indifferent? Not that it is a glaring error or anything, just a curious anomaly. ~ G…" -
21 WedCritiqued
"An Open Door" by @Rosewood Apothecary
"Is this something of your meaning in the piece? If…. I am to function, even with these faults and self doubts. But on the plus side… I have much to contribute. I’m a deep thinking person, drawn to self discovery, Mine t…" -
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07 WedCritiqued
"Favorite Wintery Memory... Neopoet Random challenge" by @Geezer
"I read this piece and enjoyed it. The last stanza confused a little, but the feedback filled in the gap. The thing is, In England Bonfires are primarily associated with 5th of November. Guy Fawkes Night or otherwise cal…" -
07 WedFirst critique offered
on "Favorite Wintery Memory... Neopoet Random challenge" by @Geezer
- November 2022
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30 WedFirst publication
The Dreamscape
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First poem published 1 days later.
About Me
Poet firstly, writer, music producer, Stand-Up Philosopher.
Originally from the English Midlands (The Black Country )Unpublished Unremarkable. So is there anything we seek other than to question our uncertainty? If there lives within us no questions then there is no purpose to living. Where then is this life, and what is our nature? How shall we describe our lives? Are we of The Art or The Mathematic? Mechanical Time will not hold us, for it is the width of our experience which is our source of expression. Time and money are the dual allusions of the material and the material is?
Location: Devonshire. ENGLAND, GBR
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