Pat Raia

Member since July 2, 2023

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Overthinking

Posted Jul 2, 2023 · 37 lines · 3 critiques

Someday
I'll
stop
thinking
about
old lovers
and
letters
and
things
I
did
for
them

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I'll
stop
worrying
about
what
got
broken
and
how
I
failed
to fix
it
I'll
stop
thinking
about
those
things
someday
but
not today...
not today

July 2024
02 Tue

Anniversary
One year of membership
July 2023
30 Sun

Received a critique
on Overthinking from @Jenifer James
"Nice one, simple but effective. The lack of punctuation didn't concern me - maybe you could just make a space between statements for clarity?"
14 Fri

Received a critique
on Overthinking from @Tawny023
"I like the minimalistic way it was written and to keep with the theme relax it didn’t make me ‘overly’ think. Or get lost in translation. The words were right there and accessible. I felt that the reader found peace fro…"
03 Mon

Received a critique
on Overthinking from @Ruby Lord
"I liked your poem, it read well and had a lot of charm about it. The only point I would make is to end each statement with a full stop. Minimalism is effective but clarity can make a statement stronger. Ruby :)"
02 Sun

Received a critique
on Overthinking from @Geezer
"that you won't make this mistake again! If you don't se your post right away, please wait a little while and visit another poem or do something else for a little bit. If you stay there waiting for it to show up, it will…"
02 Sun

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Overthinking
"Someday"
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02 Sun

First publication
Overthinking (since unpublished)
02 Sun

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About me

I'm a professional journalist with national and international credentials who has been writing poetry since childhood.

Location: FL

Posted: 2 July, 2023

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