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Member since April 24, 2012
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Frantic
I am loosing it
At the edge of sanity
Another step and damned
The aura of madness below
Menacingly stretching its murky lips
Fate; her claws wedged in my skin
Just like others I am a victim, blame her
Dragged spiteful through her coarse domain
Cursing while she chuckles. 'This is life.’ She says
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- May 2012
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02 WedReceived a critique
on The Silent Observer from @weirdelf
"You have made that feeling abundantly clear in the rest of the poem. Look at it this way, if you show the reader how abhorrent the masks are, they make their own decisions, but you have raised awareness as a poet. When…" - April 2012
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26 ThuReceived a critique
on Frantic from @Candlewitch
"The title doesn't really cover the feeling of the poem, IMHO. How about something like; "Frantic" "Fevered Mind" or "Ledge". In this line: "I curse while she chuckles. 'This is life.’ She says" you could avoid so many "…" -
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26 ThuReceived a critique
on Frantic from @China Blue
"not so much vague as I found it veryself centered with all the "I"'s and me's there is a way you can avoid this type of repetition though example: I think I'm losing it At the edge of sanity another step, damned seeing…" -
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26 ThuCritiqued
"A Brief Passing" by @AnnaNJ
"I was in the character's shoes all the while I read that. Loved it." -
26 ThuCritiqued
"Untamed temerity" by @Roscoe Lane
"This is your first poem I have read. All I can say is you know your flow. Really good." -
26 ThuFirst critique offered
on "Untamed temerity" by @Roscoe Lane
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25 WedReceived a critique
on The Silent Observer from @weirdelf
"just edit it to take out the double spacing." -
24 TueReceived a critique
on The Silent Observer from @AnnaNJ
"This is really good and really insightful. I enjoyed it a lot. You've obviously got a lot of talent and I'm excited to read your other work. The only thing that I think would improve it would be to take out the "no"s af…" -
24 TueReceived a critique
on The Silent Observer from @Roscoe Lane
"Your poem depicts very imaginitively what maybe going on while you observe. And you do it very well. A heartfelt welcome to Neopoet. Regards Roscoe.." -
24 TueFirst publication
The Silent Observer
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24 TueJoined Neopoet
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I love poetry, written too few and live in East Africa
Location: East Africa
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