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non sequitur
Member since October 9, 2013
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If pain is commensurate with pleaure,
Why do I cry?
If heartache is what I treasure,
Why exacerbate the tries?
If losing is worth
The choosing
Let me not measure
Why I'd be tar- brushed by the feather
That is you!
Pp. 19/10/13
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- October 2013
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20 Sun
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20 SunCritiqued
"In the Valley of Death and Love" by @Barbara Writes
"You GO GIRL! Cynicism and no regrets is what I'm getting here. Gloria Gaynor anybody!? ;) There's no water in desserts No love in your heart A cactus is what you become Prickly little character indeed!! ;) Nice one Barb…" -
20 SunCritiqued
"Turning Away" by @Race_9togo
"Just stopped by to take a look - and was drawn in by the title. Not sure if this is a denouncement of formal "Christianity": cf, your last verse Odin’s smiling, saying: “All of this is yours and always will be, worshipf…" -
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18 Fri
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18 FriReceived a critique
on Never Again from @loved
"as you will learn more and more tis the iron pillar of Amazon if there were one ... else Ashoka's he had many" -
18 FriCritiqued
"Hurt me Not" by @loved
"Like how you copy pasted your poem as my commentary. Definitely complimentary!! ;) Great minds think alike and all that! CHeers NS" -
18 FriReceived a critique
on Never Again from @loved
"think of me when it hurts I have faced greater misery worth it's worth and having experienced more than most , still upon mankind's wisdom and folly I boast alas some understand some don't , move on is all I say none ca…" -
18 FriReceived a critique
on Never Again from @mand
"This is a positive poem about moving on after being terribly hurt. The imagery is punchy in as much as it is very difficult and painful to get over the physical trauma of falling off a train. The memory off that pain wo…" -
18 Fri
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18 FriCritiqued
"Permanent Ink" by @paul
"this worked for me today too... Just wrote "Never Again!" as a poem to myself not to go back! Thanks! NS" -
15 TueCritiqued
"Silent Warrior." by @Naman Bagaria
"I liked this theme a lot and thought it well executed. I'm afraid there's too many cliches in the 3rd verse and that waters down the point you wish to make. Also in the last line, try to find a shorter expression for "t…" -
15 Tue
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15 TueCritiqued
"beautiful places (rengö)" by @2minichinz
"not sure I know what a Rengo is, or if it's meant to be obvious from the layout. I so want to visualize the beauty you propose to share, but I'm afraid it's lost in the present format. I would like to see different punc…" -
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15 Tue
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15 TueHighest posting month
October 2013 — 5 poems
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14 MonCritiqued
"Elephant Child" by @mand
"gosh Mand, this had a lovely feel of innocence and engenders a "Disney-land" sense of wonder. Where on earth did you get this idea from? Regards NS" -
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13 Sun
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12 SatNew follower
@loved
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11 FriFirst critique offered
on "Reaching To" (since unpublished) by @tiptopturtles
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10 Thu
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10 Thu
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10 ThuFirst publication
Silenced (since unpublished)
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09 WedJoined Neopoet
Membership begins
First poem published 1 days later.
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