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Bitch of a Night

Finally back from where she disappears
during wee hours of each night;
she did return
but, has to learn
she doesn't treat me, right.

Cloaked in night's midnight shadows,
night's beauty rare calls to me;
she may be here
but, that is my fear!
She may never let me be.

Adding up just how I feel for her
this goddess of twilight time;
her actions do tell
of my personal hell,
what she's doing to me is a crime!

I was happy when she was around me
then, night's canopy would beckon her, out;
"Be back in a while"
she says with a smile,
then, I'm left all alone to just, pout!

My patience are my only allies,
however, they're wearing quite, thin.
The way that she flirts
repeatedly hurts,
I must've committed some sin!

I never had great expectations,
and I know that my feelings are real;
I never assume
there's not enough room!
I need closure to end how I feel.

Before things get any more clouded
dissmissing each, and every care,
my hands are clean
you know what I mean?
This relatioship isn't quite fair!

When alone, I will finally find, solace
in the fact that, it didn't last long;
she just wouldn't "play",
so suffice it, to say
she left words, but she left me no.....song.

— docmaverick, Jul 04, 2012

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Bye, Honeycomb.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

Geezer

Geezer

13 years 11 months ago

The rhyme...

and rhythm was great! I liked this one, because I could relate to it. I suppose that there are many who can, but I remembered a girl in particular! Good work, ~ Gee

Roscoe Lane

Roscoe Lane

13 years 11 months ago

Loved,

Loved this full of bad memories, dealt with in humour. And as Gee has stated, good rhythm and Rhyme. Regards Roscoe.