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May 27, 2012
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surgeon’s dilemma
father....
although he was seriously ill
the surgeon declined
to operate
but he adamantly insisted
I'm paying, he snarled...
who knows
when the dangling hour...
will come
post operation
he lay horizontal
while the world rotated him a time
around the sun
then
sooner than expected
standing
… walking...
the young surgeon died
patient survived…
for over two decades
thereafter...
one’s mind has power
foreign to what is rational
— loved, May 27, 2012
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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judyanne
14 years ago
hi loved
here;'s my edit you requested xxx
sorry to have been so long
although he was seriously ill
the surgeon declined
to operate
but he adamantly insisted
I'm paying, he snarled...
who knows
when the dangling hour...
will come
post operation
he lay horizontal
while the world rotated him a time
around the sun
then
sooner than expected
standing
… walking...
the young surgeon died
patient survived…
for over two decades
thereafter...
one’s mind has power
foreign to what is rational
love judy
xxx
loved
14 years ago
You are,
Judy
m a r v e l l o u s
thanks you have turned the poem around