Once you all switch to Free verse things will get worse

Once you all switch to Free verse things will get worse
a curse
Loved has made all forget
what was poetry and verse
and
the best critique we all know,
will my cruci-fixation rehearse
ere that happens,
guys go back to your archaicity
and
leave my precious verse
to and for me...
I must thank thee
if you want to see
the bard survive in me...

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

Comments

judyanne

13 years 11 months ago

wow loved

one that really shares your particular genius here
great language use

just one thing
'the bestest critique we all know' - - 'bestest' to 'best' - the first is not a word :)

great word visual here with the hyphen loved
'will my cruci-fixation rehearse'

i really like
'guys go back to your archaicity
and
leave my precious verse
to and for me...'

love judy
xxxx

loved

13 years 11 months ago

Thanks Judy

I have like Shakespeare always did
created three new words
by now you know which

Best -test ..... a hyphen maybe could be added
cruci-fixation not really crucifixation

and archaicity..like being ancient

Thanks for your contribution
I adore you Judy

judyanne

13 years 11 months ago

yes

i liked the other two coinages
but 'bestest' to me just conjures others' use in speech that is bad english
a hyphen would fix that
xxx
i love you too loved

loved

13 years 11 months ago

thanks shall replace as best

no hyphenation here