judyanne

Apr 18, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

manifesto 1

.
time is emotion
stitched within an illusion
named separation
.

— judyanne, Apr 18, 2012

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Western Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Favourite poets? So many, so varied. I like particular songs, not necessarily the singer... and the same goes for poetry. I can honestly say though, that Alfred Noyes' The Highwayman was what inspired my love of poetry - my mother began reading it to me when I was still a baby, and it became my favourite bedtime story

Critiques

Candlewitch

14 years 1 month ago

Dear Judy,

A significant message within your haiku! You packed alot of meaning into few words and lines. I have no suggestions, only a deep appreciation for the work.

always, Cat

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

hi cat

thanks so much for the supportive comments
love judy
xxx

MDT

14 years 1 month ago

HI

i love this, the less said the more room for thought...love it...thanks.

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

thank you very much

for the very kind comments
love judy

emogothgirl

14 years 1 month ago

well judy

i just gained a lot more respect for you; i CANNOT write in haiku! so yay for you! i think it said just enough, nicely done.
always,
mag

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

thank you very much maggie mae

that is a lovely thing to say
love judy

Cloudthings

14 years 1 month ago

so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to ope

MDT said it perfectly... so much thinking rushed in where you used those few words to open doors & sweep passages clear.... just wonderful... still whirling with it!

Anni xx

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

thanks anni

so glad it hit a spot
love judy
xxxxx

Roscoe Lane

14 years 1 month ago

Don't write,

Don't write Haiku's, but the way this glides amongst the brain cells is perfect. Regards Roscoe..

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

thanks roscoe

love judy
xxx

Nordic cloud

14 years 1 month ago

This is so...so...isn't it ?

This is so...so...isn't it ?
A fascinating evocative set of words
that says something in a new way so well judyanne

a gem.

annanya.x

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

annanya

thank you very much for the supportife comments
love judyanne
xxxx

loved

14 years 1 month ago

NICE HAIKU

nice haiku
filled with emotion
no commotion
no illusion

judyanne

14 years 1 month ago

thanks loved

xxx
hugs
judy

loved

14 years 1 month ago

just great

some more comments
would love from you

pleiades

14 years 1 month ago

i usually can't stand these

i usually can't stand these kind
of writes ...they often seem to be a single thought masquerading
as something poetic

however!
this write stopped me in my tracks

i read it, felt i'd just read some kind of profound truth. this write
impacted upon me, and for some strange reason, makes me think
of death
but not in any morbid, creepy way ... just makes me think
of the ultimate separation

terrific write
loved it

cheers
p