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08/26 Sunset Wisdom

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The Fate Of Icarus And Me

I was seven, and I was mad at my Dad.

He confiscated my bike for riding it near the railroad tracks.

He deemed them as off-limits for being too dangerous.

I walked around the house pouting and sullen, like something about to blow up.

I thought that I was old enough now to take care of myself.

Then, my Grandfather took me for a walk to our favorite bench in the park.

A blazing orange sun was getting ready to set in the sky, and we sat down there quietly for a time.

"Did I ever tell you the story of Icarus?" he suddenly asked.

I shook my head and leaned in to listen;

His stories were always the best.

Then he calmly proceeded to tell this tale, in ernest...

Icarus was a boy, a lot like you, who happened to be imprisoned in a dark tower with his father.

Below them was a labyrinth, his father had built for a greedy king, and there were guards down there armed to the teeth.

They were in a Gosh Darn pickle, is how it seemed, cause, By Golly, the only way out was the window opening!

Daedalus, Icarus' Dad, happened to be an expert at making things, given he had built that maze and everything.

He got himself to work on a good way to escape, making these contraptions, from bird's feathers, wax, and strappings.

He attached them to their arms, and, By George, they had wings!

And, before they set off on their big journey, Daedalus set Icarus some boundaries for his safety, like rules, you see.

Now, the most important rule was that his boy, Icarus, not fly too close to the sun's fiery fierceness.

But, once in the air, Icarus felt oh so confident and free, he flew higher and higher, ignoring his father's boundary.

He was so darn arrogant, he flew right up close to that devil of a sun's face.

That was the boy's biggest mistake.

That blazing ball of fire melted the wax holding together his wings.

And, sadly. they just fell apart, into pieces, plunging poor Icarus right down into the sea.

His unhappy Dad, Daedalus,  why he was left all alone to just cry his eyes out and grieve.

Grandfather shook his head and cleared his throat, his way to signal he was finished; then there was silence.

And, I thought about it all, for a few quiet moments.

The story of Icarus appeared to carry a lesson that was more than coincidence.

So, after we returned for a late dinner, I was somber, but I was no  longer mad, and my thinking was clearer.

And when my Dad tucked me in that night, I told him I loved him and hugged him tight.

Now, as a father myself, when I set boundaries, I have told the story of Icarus to emphasize:

"Rules are meant to help ensure safety,  and here is a reason why."

But, whenever I tell that now well worn tale of the fate of Icarus and me, I find myself thinking of things like grandkids, yet to be.

Then, I always stop and smile, my memory returning like a prism,

As I recall sitting on that bench, and my Grandfather's sunset wisdom.

— Cathleen Reeves (wisecrone2011), Aug 14, 2026

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

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Editing Stage: Polished draft

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Region, Country: Sacramento CA USA, USA

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The poem's greatest strength is its frame: the myth of Icarus is nested inside a personal memory, and that memory is itself passed down across three generations. This structure quietly enacts the poem's own theme, that wisdom travels from grandfather to father to child and onward. The final image of the grandfather's "sunset wisdom" ties back neatly to the "blazing orange sun" at the walk's beginning, so the poem returns to where it started with added meaning. That echo is the poem's most earned moment.

The details in the opening scene do a lot of honest work. The confiscated bike, the railroad tracks, the child pouting around the house, the belief that seven is old enough to manage alone, these are concrete and specific, and they establish real stakes for a small person. The choice to have the child come to the lesson himself, rather than being told it directly, respects the reader and the child alike.

Where the poem could develop further is in the retelling of the myth, which currently reads as summary rather than as the grandfather's living voice. The lines explaining that Daedalus "happened to be an expert at making things" flatten a moment that the earlier framing promised would be a great story. One option would be to let the grandfather's telling carry some texture of how he speaks, so the myth feels performed at the bench rather than paraphrased. As it stands, the surrounding memory feels more alive than the tale at its center.

The rhyme is intermittent, appearing strongly in some passages ("free" and "boundary," "prism" and "wisdom") and absent in others. Because it comes and goes, it can feel accidental where it lands and thin where it drops away. A decision either to commit to a pattern or to release rhyme entirely would steady the music. Related to this, the spelling of the father's name shifts across the poem, appearing as Daedalus, Daedulus, and Daedelus; settling on one form would remove a small distraction from an otherwise attentive piece.

One more thought about the turn near the end: the phrase "somber, but a bit more chipper" is doing important emotional work, marking the exact moment the lesson takes hold, but "chipper" sits at a lighter register than the surrounding reflection and undercuts the weight the moment has been building. A word closer to the poem's quiet, reconciled mood might let that pivot land with the gravity it has earned.

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