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Angry Men
The world is full of them:
Angry men.
It starts when you’re a little girl.
You learn to quiet yourself,
To make yourself smaller.
You learn your opinions and feelings will never hold weight over theirs.
You think it’s just your father
Until your world expands.
Then it’s friends, teachers, co-workers, boyfriends, and husbands.
There’s no escaping until the only place to escape is in your mind.
You visualize what it would be like
To never feel the tension,
To never have to figure out someone else’s emotions,
To live freely.
You never escaped.
Now you have a daughter.
Her father’s angry.
You start to feel anger yourself,
For not choosing better,
For not having the courage to walk away,
For realizing your own flesh and blood will now feel every bit of an angry man.
But there’s no escaping.
They’re everywhere.
She will be stronger.
Better than me.
I see it already:
The fire.
The courage.
And every time she finds that match,
I’ll light it for her.
It’s the least I can do
For giving her an angry father.
About This Poem
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Critiques
Ruby Lord
3 weeks 2 days ago
Angry Men
This made me sit up and read it more than once. Women across the world live lives that are drawn in other people's boundaries. I'm not sure if we are born with that awareness, probably not. We are aware of what it looks like when we can distance ourselves from the threats we have encountered as women.Raw subject, well done for choosing this to write about. It made me think deeply. Ruby.
Geezer
3 weeks 2 days ago
From the other side...
I have three sons who have different views than most men of today. I taught them, that everyone has worth and value, and it has nothing to do with gender. I grew up in a very different time, but saw early in life, that women were very undervalued. Thanks Mom, grandma. Good job, ~ Geezer.
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