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Quiescent harmonic symphonic overture
maestro Kant imitate
nor to save himself from existential nihilism
cause there exists a Hume mung guess
gulf of fallaciousness
alternately titled: a retrospective review
randomly selecting an outdated poem
stored within Google icloud queue.
Tryouts starring musical prodigies
and/or an attendant conductor
attempt to approach ambient chorus
divinely exhibited
from Gaia's handiwork
heavenly invoking kapellmeister
magnificent nonchalant outlook
piquantly, quintessentially,
sensationally striking repertoire
unmatched vast wisdom yielding,
zephyr air albeit creativity
engineered from groundswell harmony
juxtaposed, kindled, linkedin,
manifesting noteworthy
opulent philharmonic recording
transcribing universal veritably
webbed wide world.
Wunderkinds yield Ziggurat
Acme approximated asymptote
bequeathing celestial Doppelganger
Earthly emulations formulating
fractal glinting highlighting
ineffable joie de vivre jostling,
keen kindling, la la land
legerdemain lifting logic
lording Ludwig
(Josef Johann) Wittgenstein.
Yelping zoological apostle
Al (affidavit) Gore
handily heaping
hubristically invocation
jolting kickstart measure snipping
nixed noblesse oblige opera
quickening quotidian rapid
ruination sans supreme
teetering upended venerated wise
with acumen arithmetical
Benoit Mandelbrot
chasing far-fetched ideas
light years menacing
existential nihilism purging
ogres opportunistically
resplendently ripping revered
tankard tipping unstoppably
vanquishing varietal whipsawing
wonderful wrapt yawning
youngsters warfare written wrought
yanking zestfully
crushing environmental family
granting Herculean
instant karma malevolent,
opprobrious pronouncement
quiet riot silencing severely
tragic ubiquitous vicious wreckage
yik yaks king yahoo apemen
clefting Earth to quake.
Future foragers denounce
capitalistic bamboozlers aggression
zealots wrought trashing
quintessential naked kingdoms issue
flotsam coagulates zonal wastelands
torquing quality NON
killing wise and wonderful all creatures
great and small inhabit Earth
bleached yellowed voodoo ruins.
courtesy betrayal of
Homo sapiens sapiens
now said Night Ranger
foo fighting beastie boy
sabotaged once inchoate
pristine Garden of Eden
where once upon a time
GENESIS RESPLENDENT
with Verdant pastoral
themes that billowed and flowed
across this terra firma hallowed ground
made sanctimonious
from immaculate mother Earth conception
synchronized in a symphony with terrestrial
fauna and flora which life forms abounded
via natural laboratory called nature,
especially at the seasonal dawn of spring tide
where multitudinous existence could be found
carving out a figurative zoological niche
in a kaleidoscope
of colors and multitudinous sounds galore
idyllic melodic musical sounds
artist palette of rainbow blended sights
which twin manifestations
of restorative and natural calm
assuage auditory and
visual sense pleasures respectively
serve as psychic balm
against global threat
of life, liberty and
pursuit happiness triage psalm
rampant in the form
of diabolical deliberate
dirty deeds done dirt cheap
bred in the soil of deep rooted hatred
kudzu resistance asphyxiates human camaraderie
democratic state attacked with no qualm
malicious and terroristic
coups plotted methodical map
blueprint leaves catastrophic trail of red
dire prognostications
constitute doomsday scenario
no rocket surgeon nor brain scientist,
but a garden variety, generic
heterosexual married
caucasian, latitudinarian,
nonestablishmentarian, Pennsylvanian, postlapsarian
sexagenarian Unitarian and quasi-vegetarian,
with mentality requisite,
where graven misfortune
writ large for all my struggles.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Critiques
neopoet
2 weeks 4 days ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem ambitiously weaves together philosophical references, environmental concerns, and musical imagery into a dense, allusive tapestry. The title, "Quiescent harmonic symphonic overture," sets a tone of subtle complexity and layered meaning, which the poem attempts to fulfill through its intricate language and thematic scope.
Strengths: - The poem is rich with intellectual and cultural references, from Kant and Hume to Mandelbrot and Wittgenstein, which invite readers to engage with a broad spectrum of ideas about existence, knowledge, and creativity. - The musical metaphors and terminology create a textured soundscape that complements the thematic exploration of harmony and discord, both in nature and human society. - The environmental and existential themes are timely and resonate with contemporary anxieties about humanity’s impact on Earth and the search for meaning.
Areas for improvement: 1. **Clarity and Accessibility**: The poem’s density and frequent use of esoteric references and compound phrases can make it challenging to follow. Consider balancing complexity with moments of clarity or grounding images to help readers navigate the poem’s conceptual terrain. 2. **Lineation and Punctuation**: The poem’s lack of punctuation and the use of enjambment create a stream-of-consciousness effect but sometimes hinder comprehension. Strategic punctuation or line breaks could enhance rhythm and meaning without sacrificing the poem’s fluidity. 3. **Thematic Cohesion**: While the poem covers many ideas, the transitions between philosophical musings, musical imagery, and environmental commentary occasionally feel abrupt. Strengthening the connective tissue between these sections could improve the overall flow and impact. 4. **Tone and Voice**: The poem’s voice shifts between abstract intellectualism and more concrete imagery. Clarifying the speaker’s perspective or emotional stance might help unify the poem’s tone and make its message more compelling. 5. **Word Choice and Neologisms**: Some invented or compound words (e.g., “Hume mung guess,” “linkedin” as a verb) are intriguing but may confuse readers. Ensuring that such terms serve a clear purpose or are contextualized can prevent distraction.
Suggestions: - Consider introducing recurring motifs or refrains that anchor the poem’s sprawling ideas. - Experiment with varying the pacing by interspersing denser passages with more lyrical or narrative moments. - Reflect on the poem’s intended audience and adjust the level of abstraction accordingly to maximize engagement.
Overall, the poem demonstrates a commendable ambition to grapple with profound themes through a rich, intertextual lens. Refining its structure and clarity could enhance its emotional resonance and accessibility.
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Wallyroo92
1 week 3 days ago
Quiescent harmonic symphonic overture
"Hume mung guess"
Nice wordplay.