What You Did To Me

You said you loved me.
Then you went and broke my heart.
You broke it into a million pieces.
You left me without a clue.
I guess that I didn't get the memo.
And the song.
I guess that you really were "Love Drunk".
I guess you didn't love then.

But you love me now.
But I don't love you.
So I will say no.
I will leave you without a clue.
So you will know what it feels like.
Feels like to be left out in the dark.
Feels like to be lost.
Lost without a clue of whats going on.
Going on and you are in the middle of it all.

And if you haven't heard yet.
I used to be love drunk, but now I'm hungover
I love you forever, forever is over
We used to kiss all night, now it's just a bar fight
So don't call me crying, say hello then goodbye.
You broke my heart and left me there.
You saw my tears
You saw my pain
And broke up with me in the meanest way.
"I guess you didn't get the memo I'm breaking up with you I am done"

That day I wiped my tears
And walked away.
I told myself that it would be O.K.
I stuck to that and here today I am O.K.
Until that day that you told me that.
Those words that came out of your mouth was like poison to my ears.
"I messed up I am a jerk"
Those words broke my heart again.
But he keep going.
"What I am trying to say is that I want you back. I love you."
Those words stung me
They hurt and made me feel mad, sad and depressed.

I couldn't hold them in any more.
I started crying.
I started yelling.
I was emotional.
I was out of control.
I left without looking back.
I didn't care I had to get out of there.
I couldn't talk.
All I could do was cry and think why now?
I loved him than not now.
I don't need him now.
I needed hem then and he left me.

He was so sweet and lovable.
But now he is nothing but a user.
Nothing but someone who throw me away.
Throw me away without any answers.
Without any thing.
All he left me with was a broke heart.
And tears.
I felt the pain.
But I knew that you didn't.
You didn't care.
You lied and said that you loved me.
But you didn't.

I bet that you can "still taste it on your tongue"
Taste the words.
The words you said.
You said that you loved me and then toke it back.
Just as fast.

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hillrider

16 years 3 months ago

Sip it slow

This is the second time in two days that my comment hasn't posted when I know I left one. But despite that, here's a repost : "I used to be love drunk but now I'm hung over." I like the comparison to alcohol. Both are fine while you are amidst indulgence but going overboard leaves ya with a headache and vowing to never be so foolish again! 8 Of course we usually do. There is promise here Skye, and true writing not simply a rave. If you so choose, consider revising to pare away what is a rant and give us the purer poetry inside. Like peeling an orange or onion, the tasty stuff is on the inside. You can eat the peelings but few people do, most toss it aside. I believe with a few strokes of a knife you'll leave everyone with a better taste in their mouth. Good luck and contact me if you want some help.

broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Indi

thanks you Indi and i think that it is funny to see that it doesn't ever post!! Sorry but do....I am not laughing at you!!!

ifoundaplace

16 years 3 months ago

Skye

I hate knowing you are so hurt and upset all the time, talk to me if you ever need a friend. Good job. Dani, (:

broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Dani

Thanks for the comment and the sad thing is is that i have to meet him down the road from where i live this saturday at 2.

Will Wright

16 years 3 months ago

review What You Did To Me

The title is certainly to the point and very descriptive. This poem wanders a bit and could use some editing, but the raw emotion is expressed well and clearly understood. Again, you used anaphora very effectively and the last stanza is your best. The metaphor of him tasting his words on his tongue is very good. I do have one criticism, and it's that you should check your spelling when you review your work before publishing. I'm sure you know this, but you could run it through the MS Word spellchecker before you copy it in here. But even that doesn't know the difference between "then" and "than"; is there a grammar checker too? Overall, I'd say this poem is very good, and a little editing would make it even better.

broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thanks Will

Thank you very much. And I do spelling checks after every stanza. I know that my grammer could use a little work and I am proud to say it. Grammer or spelling no one is perfect.

mrillogical

16 years 3 months ago

i really like this very

i really like this very emotional piece for me to read

broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you

Thanks for the comment. I know it is very emotional. It tells how I felt when my ex-boyfriend broke up with me and now wants me back.

ifoundaplace

16 years 3 months ago

Oh sweet Skye,

I assure you, Life definately brings you down in the dumps, has it's ups and downs, but no matter what, as long as you want to, you can get out. You can make it all better. You just have to believe in yourself. Look to others for advising. Maybe not even that, just to talk as much is great. Never give up-And I'll never stop praying. Dani (:

broken_skye

16 years 3 months ago

Thank you Dani,

Thanks for the comment. Life is like a rollercoaster. Sometimes you are going to throw up. And that is all I can say.