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This is you in poetry Nina ... if i could stand and clap I would ... brilliant love and mountains of hugs Jayne P.S I see nothing to fault,the most absolute word

This cost blood and tears, as your life does, if this is your life? Oh what tales lie here hidden in each of our lives But here you have made a stunning poem about it,vicissitudes not stunning in an epic meaning but a personal experience, so beautifully simplified as to strike a note of truth in your disillusionment and we applaud its veracity. Bravo dear Nina, Bravo! Your friend with love Ann of Norway "in good times and it bad times" In bad times?

Pure and simple and well done but leave it to me to find exception lol I was just slightly unnerved by the many "I Had's" in this piece of work However it took a lot of guts to reveal this in public. take heart I'm sure will all have done things we are not very proud of but. You do what is best at the time. You know the old addage "hindsight is twenty twenty" Chrys

(((((((Nina!!!))))))The experiences we have define and refine us, or so we think. It's an endless awakening process.... be it 17 or 33 or 63. Trust me. ;-) Love, Anna Don’t let your victories go to your head, or your failures go to your heart.

Yes Nina, your poem is beautifully written with the soul of a damsel heart and the wisdom that comes with age that things will never be as we thought it would be. Maybe we should just be like that blade of grass that blows with the wind. I still like to believe in those words of faith and love because I like to think that this mystery we are caught in is something really remarkable and in the end when we see the view of the whole puzzle we will be totally amazed. I love so much the tone in your poem of this girl telling her story. Let me wish you the happiest new year.. love. o molly

This is a moving and very intelligently written poem. There are a few rough edges but the consept is brilliant and well rendered. Moreover, this is a kind of threshold poem for you as I have not seen you stretch this far in poetry. By stretching I mean that a great deal to thought and effort have gone into the writing. You have begun to set aside boundaries, and in that greater freedom, find more substance and more style. It is very moving to witness the growth of a poet. And you, Nina, are a'growing. Quite wonderful. Brian

Love your style. Brian is correct. The growth of a poet is a wonderful thing to behold. Maybe the Bard told it well. behold the glory of youth, wondrous passion precipitous truth! should fortune, the brilliant sage, smile so on us to allow our survival, may we keep such passion tempered with patient truth to blow hot our smoldering fires held deep with love in older ages. or so a sparrow told me.

Hi Inkdragon, reading this just took the edge off christmas for me. I have two daughters, now grown up, and could have found myself going through what you seemed to have done. I never condem when this happens, i was young once myself. As a father of three i count myself fortunate, as on dec 9th this year, my wife and i celebrated 48 yrs together. If i can help in any way, i have a saying which i beleive without reservation. What's for you, will not go by you. Put away the hair vest, and stop beating yourself over the head.

what an excellent poem you've penned, honest and purely you... the wonderful you... thanks for being here. the only thing I could possible critique would be the "had's", maybe replace one or two with I'd, or not, in either case it doesn't change the swarm of honest emotion coming from this write. Richard

Wow Nina this is awesome to come across while catching up on reading!!! Trying to decipher the meaning of life and the meanings of some of the things we've been through is never an easy task...sometimes there are no answers. We all make mistakes. It's so...light to begin with and then feels like on long downward spiral into a dark place before crawling out and trying to begin again. Don't I know that feeling...amazing Nina. ((HUGS)) Peace big sis ~~~~~

Well written and I like, Seren, applaud. You are you. Honest, sweet and we cant forget talented. Love ya, Lyz. XX Well done.

Dear Nina, This is poignant and honest. An excellent and well measured poem. Yours, Daniel

*Big Smile* congratulations on Spotlight ... I had hoped this one would shine ... and it did bravooo :) love and hugs Jayne x x

Im new to this site and I am really impressed at the level of work on here. Your poem is really frank, opening yourself up like this is brave. Really nice work. Chris

True Spirit , true soulful honesty and it shines brighter that any star... An awakening a rebirth and you my dear are ready for it. Thanks you for your sharing and I will await the flood of poetic expression to come. Very Best Wishes Seabhac

Moving and touching Nina . Theo

Your poetry is stunning, I hope to meet you here on this site and learn all your secrets! :) Great write. Dale

What ever it original intention, it final intention is clear Nina. We appreaciate your poetry and honesty. They are definetly all you. I can relate well to this as well. I think most could. It's past looking point of view makes the lesson stand out. Innocence not lost with virginity, virginity not being the poison apple that our elders made it, and loves belief in youth that it will win no matter the obstacles. Then age gives us a wisdom that only time can impart, and steals our innocence for a while. But we remember. I loved it. Julie D.D.

Hey Nina, Hope your christmas was good. I believe life is what you make it, this concept has just about kept me sane through tough tough times. Its a little mental wall i use to help block the negative destruction that comes from my often bad choices. Sometimes i feel that the ''Had's'' in poetry are needed to convey a certain thought, feeling, point across. When dealing with real life poetic contruction doesn't always need to be flowery or subtle suggestion through imagery. That is just my thoughts though and to be honest im not experienced enough for my thoughts to carry any real feed back weight : ) vicki

I stumble upon such a gem as this!! What a diamond it is! Indeed Nina, sentiments, growth, we have all been through in one or other fashion, beautifully captured in words. For you my friend, the cliche' again stands: THE BEST IS YET TO COME! ;) Congratulations on a well deserved SPOTLIGHT! BOni

Just wanted to come back and leave a comment ... huni this is a watershed poem in my eyes your on a curve dont hold back let what will be will be and I think you maybe shooting to the stars ... I can see the flame burning ever brighter love and hugs and respect Jayne-Chloe you are what we call a staunch mate here,no higher compliment in our eyes