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"Revealed"

I know what it’s like
To have NO money, in the bank
I know the feeling, of calling in to work
Because there’s no gas, in the tank
I know the feeling of catching up bills
If only for a while
I know the feeling , of facing foreclosure
And still mustering up a SMILE
You say, “Man, how do you do it?”
Show me how, cause I can’t see
How someone who believes in GOD
Could ever even be
Bouncing checks from left to right
In the red and all
Without the MASTER’S guidance day to day
The richest man in the world, can even fall
From grace to grace
I take each breath
Trying to fulfill
The Calling that is on my life
That gift now being revealed
I heard, it said, once before
Your prosperity is tied to your call
I stand before you, here today
Now to share it ALL

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zarul

16 years 9 months ago

hi

Hi. not a bad poetry at all. I have a suggestion, in which i think can make this poem better. in line 2 to line 4, in my opinion, it is better for you to put out the commas. ThIS will strengthen the meaning and add precision on those lines and make your poem better. But it is your work. You can either take it or drop it. But just think 'bout it
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chappell

16 years 9 months ago

"Revealed"

Thanks for your comments. I do see what you mean about the commas in lines 2 & 4. I appreciate your input.