loved

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Yes,I Shall Wait

Oh my beloved,
As you go off to war,
I shall wait your return
In one piece

I shall be a single teen aged mother
Till your return.
Hopefully, your return
Is not with mournful trumpet call
Or Colours dipped on cobbles bare
As normally many do

Till then I shall await my Love,
For you,
As a widow
At this young age
It wouldn't do

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: ROU

Comments

Candlewitch

14 years 7 months ago

Hi Loved,

Nice work! But consider this:

Instead of:
Till you return,
Hopefully, your return

Till your arrival,
Hopefully, your homecomming

always, Cat

loved

14 years 7 months ago

Yenti AND Cat

hope this piece
can also now
be to rest
Amen

Race_9togo

14 years 7 months ago

Loved

This is good, but I don't understand the last two lines.

loved

14 years 7 months ago

thanks a great deal

in the repeated edits
the typo over came me
.Thanks for the cute observation
grateful

scribbler

14 years 7 months ago

hi loved

A good tale of what many young wives are going through. I agree with Jim about the last 2 lines though..........stan

loved

14 years 7 months ago

Thanks Stan

the typo has been blasted
sorry....
my above remarks do accept
thanks

loved

14 years 5 months ago

Where ru my friend

Stan ....
Lost in the wilderness of time
you can't be o man
you are the Stan
who always did stand

loved

14 years 5 months ago

relieved

thanks Rosy
have a great day
and also to stan convey

Race_9togo

14 years 5 months ago

wondered

where Stan had gotten to. Good to hear he's OK.

loved

14 years 5 months ago

Thanks

I am grateful