Dimes

I'm no expert just a simple person,so all i can say is that it made me want to sit down for a peaceful moment with my favorite volume of recorded dreams. for I too know the nature of those dimes,all to stardust in the morn. Lacy, Where power corrupts,poetry cleanses.

and a great theme. I am playing with the first line in my mind: ------------------- Dimes are falling out of the stars tonight ------------------- Might you replace 'out of' with 'from?' I believe it's the shortened syllable count on the next two lines. there's a declining meter but I'm feeling as is the step from line 1 to 2 might be too great. That's not hard advice, just something to look at. But I love the last stanza: ----------------------- I turn away from the absurd melee Sit and open a favourite volume A favourite volume of recorded dreams; I will visit the stars tomorrow night When their silence can be heard. ----------------------- The repetition works and the message is spot on. Excellent job. --Jonathan Annoying the world, one person at a time (Group discounts available)

Smiles:) Barbara A sense of peace from the world. The rat race I choose not to mingle, for the dimes falling from the stars. Another beautiful piece from you.

I see it rather like a moment of finding answers to the inner questions, like a wisdom moment totally submersed in the picture beyond the window. The final is superb - the "silence" that can be heard goes perfectly well with the noise from the falling dimes. Excellent work, beautiful images ... congrats! Cheers from Marius!