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I really like the feel of this,
but not to sure about depth and content,
Any constructive thought's would be
a great help
thanks
Peter
Sitting at the waters edge -
Succumbed by notions, playing with my head,Eyes focused, the moon offering,Ambers; ….. Of shimmering light, Subdued mellowed, and tranquilised,Reflections of me peering through,Casting no shadows, for you to view,Dancing silhouettes diffused,Seeing only people; ….. ViewingI’m not sure what; …. Or of whom, Weightless painless, but sight of ripplesPassing overhead, distant sound; echoingI see people looking, and -Their tears are falling down,I’m confused, and somewhat bemused,Who’s playing who.-I must move to get a better view,Hmm strange,I can now; … clearly see, There’s me, sitting at the water edgeLooking down peering through,Seeing me; …. Lying -Lying amongst the reeds,
but not to sure about depth and content,
Any constructive thought's would be
a great help
thanks
Peter
Sitting at the waters edge -
Succumbed by notions, playing with my head,Eyes focused, the moon offering,Ambers; ….. Of shimmering light, Subdued mellowed, and tranquilised,Reflections of me peering through,Casting no shadows, for you to view,Dancing silhouettes diffused,Seeing only people; ….. ViewingI’m not sure what; …. Or of whom, Weightless painless, but sight of ripplesPassing overhead, distant sound; echoingI see people looking, and -Their tears are falling down,I’m confused, and somewhat bemused,Who’s playing who.-I must move to get a better view,Hmm strange,I can now; … clearly see, There’s me, sitting at the water edgeLooking down peering through,Seeing me; …. Lying -Lying amongst the reeds,