Senses reflected

I think the line "an ere for an ere" is very clever! May I make the suggestions: break the longer lines into two sentences for added emphesis. (And)The ending for example: Instead of: "but she is too far gone I cannot reach" How about: "but I cannot reach her for she is too far gone" Always, Cat

an incredible pace! one common thread in your work...they read to me like performances...love it!! very clever my friend! <3 Emarie @~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@~~~~~~~@ "Tempted by your Tainted Love I sure do love the way you come inside my crystal ball..." Buckcherry 'Next to You'

like through thick cotton wool, I strain to here fading voices hence the hands´ unrestful movement... you know on the first read, i read it as 'the hands' unresentful movement'...which I loved, except I need to check my eyes!-) regardless, i love the sense of constraint and longing your poem invokes thank you for sharing it james

and 'I strain to here...' nice! james

one of Erasure's newer songs, "Don't Say You Love Me" right now, and it's funny how if you listen to the right song while reading a poem it takes on such a fullness of flavor. I felt mournful here, because I related to this sad situation as you described in your piece. Usually it doesn't take place in an immediate moment, but is only viewed in retrospect over the course of a drawn out period. I think your spelling adds to the poem. Now I want to listen to this song and read this poem again, lol! "(Don't say you love me) (Strange things that make me die) (Don't say you love me) (Strange things that make me die) I don't belong I'm still around won't steal you like a radio I'm still around I won't be long gonna treat you like an angel But don't say you love me Strange things that make me die Dance 'till we're high you're shy Don't say you'll cry I told you lies I'm still around won't steal your act my angel I won't be long it's still your round or serialize the radio But don't say you love me Strange things that make me die Dance 'till we're high you're shy Don't say (don't say) you'll cry (What do you say?) (What do you say?) Don't go on I see your eyes I screw you around my angel You're still my love it's in your eyes our song is on the radio But don't say you love me (what do you say?) Strange things that make me die Dance 'till we're high you're shy Don't say you'll cry Don't say you love me Don't say you'll cry I'm high Don't say you'll cry" Ok, so honestly the lyrics of that song have nothing to do with your poem, maybe it's just the martial beat it possesses. Or maybe it's just true that everyone takes their own thing from a piece. Anyhow, I thought your poem was very well written. Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible

actually the stereotype here is that ALL Germans are partial to Erasure :) as well as David Hasselhoff... interesting... I think I might be the only person in my *ahem* "demographic" to know who they are here in America. A shame, I've always liked their music. I figure that you were the girl under glass, though could be wrong. In a way the allusion can be to your opening yourself up to critique in life, poetry, art, etc. The muted features feels much like how I think of myself sometimes; unidentifiable, at least to me. That's what I picked up. Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible

The first time I heard them was back in ninth grade with "enjoy the silence." Am a big fan myself. Underworld, My Bloody Valentine, and Daft Punk are some of my other favorite electropop bands. The story of Job is a great allegory to our relationship to God. It asks the question "how deep is your faith? What are you willing to go through for God?" and it teaches us the depth of God's love for us. Did you know that most theologians believe the chronologically it was the first book of the Bible actually written? Hmmm, Anne Clark? I will have to check her out! Mark W. Galatians 5:22-23 "22 But the Holy Spirit produces this kind of fruit in our lives: love, joy, peace, patience, kindness, goodness, faithfulness, 23 gentleness, and self-control. Against these, there is no law!" My favorite verse(s) in the Bible

But have one little nit to pick. I strain to here (hear) Other than that, I thought the flow was wonderful. Took me on a ride. Respectfully, Rett: "At twenty, if you are not a liberal, you have no heart. At thirty, if you are not a conservative, you have no brain." Winston Churchill