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MY DEAR BROTHER

My dear brother By. Machada (aka) Vanilla 8/14/07 MY DEAR BROTHER WHAT'S WRONG? WHAT DID I DO? DID I MESS UP BEIN' YOUR SISTER? CAUSE IF I DID I NEVER MENT 2 HURT U. WHAT IS IT? I REALLY NEED 2 KNOW. IT SEEMS LIKE YOU HAVE THESE PAIN WITH IN THAT YOU NEVER TEND 2 SHOW. BUT BEING ANGRY ISENT' ALWAYS THE RIGHT KEY. IF YOU’RE HURTIN' INSIDE PLEASE JUST REACH OUT AND TELL ME. IT'S a BLESSIN' FROM GOD THAT YOUR MY BROTHER. HE WOULD WHANT US 2 BE CLOSER, BECAUSE WE CAME FROM WITHIN THE SAME MOTHER. I JUST WANT YOU 2 LOVE ME LIKE A BROTHER SHOULD LOVE HIS SISTER. I STILL REMEMBER YOU AND YOUR BOYS LAUGHIN' N THE ROOM ABOUT HOW YOU JUST DISSED HER. I'M TALKIN' ABOUT ME, YOUR SISTER, YOUR FLEASH N BLOOD. I CRYED MANY TIMES ABOUT IT AND HURT WATCHED MY TEARS FLOOD. PEOPLE ASKIN ME WHAT'S WRONG? WHAT CAN I DO? AND ME SAYIN' O NOTHINS WRONG.......BUT IF THEY ONLY KNEW!!! YOU SEE MY DEAR BROTHER, IM CRYIN OUT BECAUSE OF YOU. SO I SAY THAT ONLY 2 SAY THIS MY DEAR BROTHER.........SOMETHIN' NEED'S 2 CHANGE. HAVE YOU EVER BEEN SHOT N THE HEART? BUT AT A VERY CLOSE RANGE? WELL THAT'S HOW IT FILL'S 2 ME WHEN WE ARGUE AND WHEN WE FIGHT. YOU HAVE YOUR WAYS AND I HAVE MINE..... BUT BEIN WRONG JUST ISENT RITE!!! MY DEAR BROTHER I BEG 4 US 2 BE BETTER THEN WE ARE. BECAUSE RIGHT NOW WERE NOT EVEN CLOSE 2 WHERE WE SHOULD BE WERE EXTREMELY FAR! JUST FILL ME ON THIS BRO BECAUSE I'M TRYIN MY BEST. NOW I'VE SAID ALL I CAN SAY, SO MY DEAR BROTHER YOU SPIT THE REAST........... MY DEAR BROTHER....
— Vanilla23, Aug 15, 2007

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