The gibbous moon

how do I put this without sounding offensive? I am sure you are a good writer, but I cannot tell because you seem to be trying to show the reader your intellect with your vocabulary choice, and therefore your poems just aren't connecting with me. Take it for what it's worth, I'm just a blue collar hick. lol

Ok I got it. I don't believe in bludgeoning others with a vocabulary. Especially in their replies. That just smacks of pretension, which always smells of horse shit. However if one word hangs you up then I believe you need to look it up in a dictionary. "Big Words" should be used sparingly, like spices in a soup...too many you loose the flavor. Overall an outstanding poem. Work, stretch, take risks, visualize your future. Become the poet you have always longed to be. All that is needed is honest effort.-DSB

Hey its just me Orgami i like that word that sssss word its the word that would describe what my wheel disc sounded like when it came off one night on my high speed endevours through a sleeping city it was a morphing doppler thing I love your poem and i am not teasing you about a word i love that word but sometimes the moon reminds me of old chrome on the blacktop of heaven glimmering on the twelve zodiacs sharp as a parked Pontiac restless Sirius gaurding them all busted glass stretching the whole three sixty yard the great way Yah I love your poems!

Great- poem an epic in minature , I like that this poem is a minature Pinksheep.

Don't let the language die. English has more words than any other language---and there is a reason for it! Drachm

Jess What A Gem The creativity, and thought, given and versed, a story told, The choosing of words so aptly put, Not only did I enjoy reading, but have learnt some new words to, I thought that this forum was for exactly this, A workshop for everyone to partake and have first class access To learned people, Whilst I make no apologise for others, if they feel that way maybe They should have a taste of other sites, There are many great and writers here which have and will continue To be a great inspiration, I personally thank you all, Peter Don't you dare ~~~~~~~~~Creativity Is to think more efficiently~~~~~~~~~~

you take out the 2 the{s} {this is a good poem and I have learnt what a Gibbous moon is }you know they are superfluous and thank you for writing this-

Smiles:) Barbara love learning new words (gibbous)thanks for writing this. (sussurating) notice after second time reading this. It read so well the first time didn't realize it was there until i read the comments. Must go to the internet for this as my word doc has nothing on it. love learning new word especially the way you use them in your poetry. not so many that I tired out and quit. this is a must read again, wonderful

for ease of access. Good art takes work as does appreciating good art. Good art should lift you up - even on your tiptoes to the dictionary on the top shelf. If you don't understand something, you should enlarge yourself, not ask the world to be smaller.

....that you've all missed one thing, including the writer; and it's this perspective(I sincerely hope I'm not using too big of words)...think about the rhythm of the poem, "...and how it rolls off the tongue...,"....one can almost hear a "cadence" when you say, "a SUSS-erating path of LIGHT !" Try saying it like Jimmy Durante would've, or do your worse "Nixon impression" while shaking your head...it truly is a party for the tongue; and for that, weirdelf... I salute you ! #:>) Vote Five ! docmaverick.

Smiles:) Barbara Well deserved masterpiece> Has inspired me to learn more about the many moon while trying my hand at sonnet. Did not know the moon had so many names and went through so many phases. or rise so many times, etc. Thanks for sharing a magnificent piece of poetry. sussurating? i am still not clear on its meaning. share your wisdom .I can only glean from you poem what it seems to mean.

Hold on to your heart, it may be the big one! I like this and I think you used the perfect word. Beautiful and fitting! Rett: "This way to the Great Egress" P.T. Barnum

'tis rather lugubrious to circumvent the wheel. How'd I miss this whale of a tale? ~A

Way to go 'Weirdelf'. I think I had an English teacher once tell me, "Less is More, when possible." "Poetry like this Jess is right in your wheelhouse. Keep these gems comin'". Writing poetry is like Reading poetry, it's alot of work, 'my god you might have to look something up in a dictionary'. ATTN; This poetry; these people write, are fragments of the human condition and imagination. Don't be intimidated by words, or [when you don't know them]. And especially try not to, piss Writers off. You may have swords, but they have pens. Ps Nicccce...Susurrating! Peace DDC

This poem has a hauntingly beautiful characteristic to it. I enjoyed it very much even if I did have to look up the s word. Using the dictionary is good for my soul! 5 stars! Always, Cat

I apologise for not commenting on this well thought out poem... and even before I looked up sussurating, I could see the moon's reflecting light on the ocean top because I've seen it before and now... I can hear it too...! a painting with so few words... and the longing invitation.. yes.. liked it very much... I checked out your revisions, I like that feature, and agreed with it.. Richard

multi-lingual I'm not either.. there are so many that are and have mastered our language so well.. I've noticed it here and seen you comment on it before.. as a child we lived in Germany, Dad was in the army.. we had to take German, but, I only remember a small amount.. enough to know it is a beautiful language.. thanks Jess... Richard