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Apr 23, 2026
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Rain
I still check the weather
In your city
Like it's my responsibility
To remind you to grab an umbrella
I still call your number
Every once in a while
Hoping it was all a bad dream
But it's the machine that picks up
I still -
I have got to stop
None of this
Could ever bring you back
— Eleanore Astra Prose, Apr 23, 2026
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: Feel free to comment on anything, but also note that I write mostly for myself, and I have a style that does not follow any structure, really. I don't try to write a certain way, I just write what I feel and what comes most natural to me.
Style/Type: Free verse
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What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
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Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Polished draft
Critiques
Geezer
1 month 3 weeks ago
I am just...
beginning to understand the need for minimal language and punctuation. I still found the angst real, the emptiness palpable. I am admittedly, still learning that in order to appreciate a poetic piece you need to see what the poet is trying to show you. I like the 'Dear Diary'
style. Be sincere, keep it real, and you will always have readers. ~ Geezer.
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