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Echo Tripping
I once shouted into the void looking for myself
Deep in the darkness to see if there was anybody else
But there was no resonance other than the cold itself
Though a future ghost caressed me and left me with some welts
I looked for solutions in the least likely places
Through lonely nights in seedy cities driving under streetlights
And when I arrived at the edge just by a few paces
From the cliff I heard an echo that gave me quite the fright
Those welts came back again like a soft swift reminder
My yesterdays don’t define me or dictate the road ahead
And yet somewhere along the way I became kinder
Shaping me into a new concept of myself instead
From time to time I find old verses I penned and spilled
The screams from nightmarish dreams as if I almost drowned
Now the echoes return with a cacophonous gild
Along with words from other poets who also found the sound
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Sometimes reading my old poetry makes me cringe (I was young). Then as I got older and started sharing, I found that I wasn't alone in my journey.
Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
1 month 3 weeks ago
This truly...
hits home! I was going through some old work, refining it, filing it away for my eventual book. I was drawn to those memories I had written of back years ago, and ask myself, with fresh eyes; "Could I have done this better?" Sometimes, I stop to smooth out something that bumps when I read it or see a comment that suggests a way to make it better. I then realize how much I have learned from being here. Yes, fellow poets have influence on us, like it or not. Thank you for sharing that. I need some extra optimistic rays of sunshine such as you to get me through the day! LoL
~ Geez.
Wallyroo92
3 weeks 6 days ago
Echo Tripping
Thank you for much for reading and commenting Geez.
I find that time has giving more insight and reflection, especially when it comes to meeting other writers and poets who share similar experiences and emotions. In a way, I have always thought that poetry has been my therapy as I'm sure it has been for others as well.
Hope all is well.
W
Geezer
3 weeks 5 days ago
One final thought...
the line: "Those welts came back again like a soft swift reminder." I don't think I would have used [soft], swift reminder. It would have been [harsh], swift reminder. ~ Geez.