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This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoet Weekly 02/22/26 to 02/28/26

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the waiting

should fate unwind
too soon you’ll fail
to see the stars,
the moon unveil

aligned in orbit
i hear her cry
the hand of space
of space and time

should you bite
in tandem skies
I follow close
with clever eyes

today, tomorrow
now and then
may death give way
our prospects land

you’d lend a hand
and I’d accept
no one beginning
may grant us end

lost and found
in evening sorrow
i fight for life
her sword I borrow

please take my hand
the war is won
i’m on your side
i always was

About This Poem

Last Few Words: going through a breakup :,)

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Ontario

Favorite Poets: charles bokowski , sylvia plath , savannah brown, allen ginsberg , mary oliver

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

1 month 3 weeks ago

Oh, how I wish...

that you had continued your rhyming. Your rhyme and near rhyme are excellent! What happened? ~ Geezer.

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Lavender

Lavender

1 month 3 weeks ago

the waiting

So good to see your poetry again!  Although, I'm sorry for the experience you are going through regarding the nature of this piece.  I feel the heartache throughout.  Wonderful writing - I hope to read more soon, and I'm so very glad you've returned.

Best regards,

L