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Feb 24, 2026
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Outta Place, Outta Time
Have you ever found yourself having a dream
Where you couldn’t quite figure out the place or time?
Like old faces you’ve seen or places you’ve been
And yet something along the way doesn’t align?
It’s not really a nostalgic trip down memory lane
Like when a song comes on and it takes you back
But as if a present-day reality mixes with some old fantasy
And the fusion makes a remix of a newfound soundtrack
You wake up confuzzled in your bed (or behind the wheel)
Trying to wrap your head around about what you feel
Thinking of the words said in that delirious reel
And how the moment fled just as all seemed surreal
Maybe the synapses in the cortex converge
When imagination and experience intersect
Where the past and present overlap then diverge
And the dream out of time and place has this effect
Have you ever had that kind of dream?
Or is it just me?
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I know I can polish this up a bit, but when the words come I got let 'em flow.
Review Request Direction: Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
1 month 4 weeks ago
O boy!...Sounds like some…
O boy!...
Sounds like some kind of Existential Dreaming thing. I get it.
I think: "Dreams are the subconscious brain trying to get in touch with the conscious part." If I remember correctly, I've heard it said, that the subconscious
has limited ability to contact the conscious, but sometimes is so powerful, that it can produce "waking-dreams" or what some might call pre-cognitive trance; like you describe "behind the wheel" Yep, been there and done that. I enjoyed the trip, liked the mix of line rhyme and in general, the whole of the conversation.
I would suggest that you try to keep the meter within a beat or [possibly two].:
Have you ever found yourself having a dream
Ever found yourself having a dream
Where you couldn’t quite figure out the place or time?
Couldn't quite figure the place or time?
Like old faces you’ve seen or places you’ve been
Like old faces you've seen, places you've been
And yet something along the way doesn’t align?
something around here, doesn't align.
Go through the whole of the poem, read iot aloud to youself.
Find the bumps. ~ Geez.
Wallyroo92
1 month 3 weeks ago
Outta Place, Outta Time
Thanks for your input Geez.
I usually read these out loud but while at work I find myself doing the finger counting, so I know I look a little funny if someone walks by, which is placed the comments in the last few words. I'll def give it another look.