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Feb 18, 2026
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Selenophile
I speak with the Moon, confess my pain,
Her gentle light brings peace again.
I say I don’t want the sun to rise,
Forever stay within my skies.
I beg the night to linger more,
To taste this beauty I adore.
I weave my verses, poetry free,
Just like I did in childhood’s plea.
Her light within this darkest night
Tells me that hope is still in sight.
She says that life, just like the sky,
Can’t always dark and blackened lie.
This dialogue with wine I trace,
And light a cigarette in place.
I wish we’d always stay as one,
And never see the rising sun.
I walk through alleys dark and deep,
Your glow protects me as I keep.
When your light falls upon my frame,
It feels just like a warm embrace again.
Your shining in my eyes appears,
And brings a smile through silent tears.
It’s always joy, my heart’s delight,
When on my balcony you dine at night.
You are silent, yet from you
A melody within me grew.
With you I feel secure, at rest,
To you my soul I have confessed.
Each triumph and each loss I see
In this life’s battlefield for me.
I’m madly drawn, obsessed, it’s true
That’s why I hate the daytime too.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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neopoet
2 months ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem effectively conveys a deep emotional connection with the Moon, using it as a symbol of solace, hope, and introspection. The consistent personification of the Moon as a confidant creates an intimate atmosphere, allowing readers to engage with the speaker's vulnerability.
Strengths: - The use of imagery—such as "Her gentle light," "darkest night," and "warm embrace"—evokes sensory experiences that enhance the poem’s mood. - The recurring contrast between night and day underscores the speaker’s preference for darkness as a time of reflection and comfort. - The poem's structure, with its steady rhyme scheme, lends a rhythmic quality that complements the contemplative tone.
Areas for improvement: - Some lines rely on familiar expressions ("life’s battlefield," "madly drawn, obsessed") that could be replaced with more original or specific imagery to deepen the poem’s impact. - The phrase "This dialogue with wine I trace" introduces wine and cigarettes abruptly; further development or integration of these elements could clarify their symbolic significance or emotional resonance. - Consider varying sentence structures or line lengths to create more dynamic pacing and avoid predictability in the rhyme and meter. - The closing couplet, while summarizing the speaker's feelings, could benefit from a more nuanced or surprising insight to leave a stronger lasting impression.
Overall, refining the imagery and exploring more distinctive metaphors could elevate the poem’s emotional depth and originality.
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Mark
2 months ago
Hello Kevin
Welcome along! I think our AI has it pretty much right. Not a lot of room for improovement as your first poem here is pretty good. Many of us here are night owls and luna tics lol
Best,
Mark
Kevin Bici
2 months ago
Hi Mark,Thank you very much…
Hi Mark,
Thank you very much for your kind words and warm welcome. I really appreciate your feedback and support, it means a lot to me, especially as a newcomer here. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem and I look forward to sharing more with the community.
Best regards,
Kevin
Alex Tanner
1 month 3 weeks ago
Hello Kevin.
This appealed to my, some would say old fashioned taste, in its simple rhythmic quality. Any suggestions at this stage would be simply nit picking so I will just say well done for a worthy win. Alex