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May 22, 2011
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All Too Common
a muggy night
scent of sweat
stultifying
she clamors
head in hands
of fools and attitudes
always
her discomfort sets the mood
poor susceptible
princess pea
seems all the world's
a briar patch
and she
with no shoes
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rottiestyl
14 years 11 months ago
Can feel the irony in this
Can feel the irony in this one.
seems all the world's
a briar patch
and she
with no shoes
what a great stanza. No hidden meaning here just a clear shot in the face of a hard to plow road. I really enjoyed it.
Rottie - Kim
(V)
Kailashana2
14 years 11 months ago
feeling.....black and blue...
feeling.....black and blue....perhaps she and I are sole mates. ;-)
~A
Janice Pearce
14 years 11 months ago
All Too Common
Loved this one from you!! Thanks for sharing, and I too loved that last stanza~