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Nov 18, 2025
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C'est la vie
C'est la vie
We will not live forever
We will die
Someday here on earth
We still have some life
To live ahead of us
Please don't sleep in
During the mornings
Because you will be
Wasting a day away
Ce la vie
It is God
That has made
The four seasons for
We do live in
He made
Summer, Winter, Fall, and Spring
Now we are having
The last days of Summer
We are not happy
That the summer is ending so fast
The birds went south already for
The winter
When the night arrives
Here on earth
We go straight to bed
Because God made a
Sleeping schedule for
us to follow it
We never stay up
Late past our
Bedtime
Also, tomorrow will
Be a new day
And we will be up
Also the first thing
We do when we wake up
Is pray to God
Also, it was our God
That gave us the gift
Of health
Also, we must take
Good care of our health
We have chosen not to smoke
Also, we have chosen
Not to drink
Also, we must
Take care of our hygiene
Every day we take showers
In the mornings
Nobody can't live without
Friends in our lives
Because we would be
Lonely
Yes we need to make
Some friends
In our lives
About This Poem
Last Few Words: That is an old poem Written by Aldo kraas
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
neopoet
5 months ago
Neopoet AI (premium) [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
The poem presents a series of reflections on mortality, daily habits, gratitude, and values such as health, faith, and friendship. The structure is largely free verse, with short lines and a conversational tone. The use of repetition—particularly with the phrase "Also"—creates a list-like effect, which can be both a stylistic choice and a potential area for revision. The poem’s language is straightforward, with little use of imagery or metaphor, which gives it a direct, almost instructional quality.
Thematically, the poem moves from existential considerations ("We will not live forever") to practical advice ("Please don't sleep in"), and then to spiritual and moral guidance. This progression is logical, but the transitions between ideas are abrupt, and the poem might benefit from more connective tissue—either through imagery, narrative, or more fluid transitions. The references to God and the four seasons introduce a sense of universality, but the poem does not explore these images in depth.
The repetition of "Also" at the beginning of many lines becomes distracting and may weaken the impact of each individual statement. Varying sentence structure and using more vivid language could help maintain reader engagement. The poem’s message about cherishing life, maintaining health, and valuing friendship is clear, but the delivery is didactic; incorporating more sensory detail or personal anecdote could make the themes more resonant.
The poem’s title, "C'est la vie," suggests an acceptance of life’s transience, but the body of the poem is more prescriptive than resigned or philosophical. Clarifying the intended tone—whether it is acceptance, instruction, or reflection—could help unify the poem’s voice. There is a minor error in the phrase "Ce la vie," which should match the title's "C'est la vie" for consistency.
Overall, the poem articulates its themes plainly but could be strengthened by greater attention to language, structure, and the development of its central images and ideas.
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