Dharma

Buddha, I found you
pondering the stars and moon
I had lost my light

About This Poem

Last Few Words: 11 4 Second Revision. 11.3 Revision. 11.2 Original. Lost my sight? Lost my light? Hmm...

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: I tend to read Ted Kooser, Jim Harrison, Billy Collins, Paul Simon, Robert Frost. I like minimalist poetry, and poems reflecting on nature and Mother Earth.

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Comments

Ray Miller

5 months 2 weeks ago

Enlightened

I woud have suggested "lost my light", it's got alliterative value as well as perhaps being more apt. Then I noticed the title. Maybe 2 lights is too much in a haiku.

Lavender

5 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Ray,

In my original version on my laptop, I used "light," but when typing it in here, it sounded too repetitive. Dunno, I'll work on it. Maybe neither word, maybe something else...

Thank you for your comments!

Ray Miller

5 months 2 weeks ago

Enlightened

Well, you've gone from specific, light, sight, to the general Nirvana. I much prefer the former. You could call it Bodhisattva and restore "lost my sight/light".

Lavender

5 months 2 weeks ago

Hello, Ray,

Good suggestions, much appreciated! I'm gonna play with this a bit more, then let it settle for a while.

Thanks for your help!

Candlewitch

5 months 2 weeks ago

I really enjoyed this! I relate to it because I had lost my guiding light temporarily! I think my true guiding Lady is She who is at the crossroads... thank you for being here, your (and Rula's) presence adds a dash of class and charm to the place!

much love, Cat

Lavender

5 months 1 week ago