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Oct 29, 2025
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ANNIE
ANNIE
I don’t need to see singers sing
As all I need to feel is to listen
With that gentle magical voice
Rising up high to swoop down
That gets deep under my skin
And knows its way to my soul
With that hint of vocal vibrato
A held note cuts through it all
To reach me, and to touch me
It’s not just a voice, but words
As if being spoken only to me
Whatever the lyric, I’m a slave
Accepting everything she sings
Sharing the love, and also pain
Whether with a sweet backing
Or even when singing acapella
It fits well, ending with a smile
Then, silence makes me shiver
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
neopoet
5 months 3 weeks ago
Neopoet AI [2025-04]
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet’s AI:
This poem effectively conveys a deep emotional connection to a singer named Annie, capturing the intimate experience of listening to her voice. The imagery of the voice as "gentle," "magical," and able to "get deep under my skin" is vivid and evocative, successfully portraying the power of music to affect the soul.
The poem’s structure, with its flowing lines and lack of strict rhyme or meter, mirrors the natural ebb and flow of listening to a song, which enhances the immersive quality. The progression from the physical sensation ("rising up high to swoop down") to the emotional impact ("knows its way to my soul") is well handled, creating a layered experience.
However, some lines could benefit from more precise or varied language to avoid repetition and enhance impact. For example, the phrase "It’s not just a voice, but words" might be expanded or rephrased to deepen the distinction between voice and lyric. Additionally, the line "Whatever the lyric, I’m a slave" uses a strong metaphor, but "slave" might feel heavy or ambiguous; considering alternative expressions could clarify the intended emotional nuance.
The closing lines, especially "Then, silence makes me shiver," effectively capture the lingering effect of the performance, but the transition to silence could be made more dramatic or nuanced to heighten the emotional resonance.
Overall, the poem succeeds in expressing a personal and sensory response to music, and with some refinement in language and imagery, it could achieve even greater emotional depth and clarity.
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Rula
5 months 3 weeks ago
Under the influence
Of music. I think I like that, but thought you need to make line breaks clearer to give a breath for both the piece and the reader as well.
Just a suggestion.
Thank you for sharing.
P.S. I'm trying to catch up with few poetry that I missed the last few weeks. I'll be more than happy if you could read mine and tell me what do you think. Constructive feedback never harms.:)