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MILLY'S LAUNDRY

Argentina's the trump place to go
when you're needing a laundromat ho'
for the price of some beans
all your green will be clean
it's routine for a team in the know!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I think my internal rhyming is improving. Any suggestions are appreciated, of course.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Lake Simcoe Canada

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel,

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

6 months 2 weeks ago

I suspect that...

there being a difference in dialects, and rhythmic inclinations, that there are probably some little deviations in it, but I followed it very well; am also loving the hidden message. Lmao, ~ Geez.
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