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Aug 08, 2025
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Shimmer and Sway
I asked her to dance
even though I barely knew how.
It was a garden party.
I worried I'd look the fool.
The stars blinked some,
but didn't laugh,
and neither did she.
— Michael Anthony, Aug 08, 2025
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About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Critiques
Geezer
10 months ago
I guess...
we all have had the problem of the first dance; some of us faced that fear, and we managed to stand up and sway around the floor with her in our arms and not fall down; the rest never learned to dance.
This is a great story told with very few words, yet so descriptive. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony
10 months ago
Thankfully, there was no…
Thankfully, there was no actual photographic evidence! Thanks Geez!
Michael Anthony
10 months ago
Thankfully, there was no…
Thankfully, there was no actual photographic evidence! Thanks Geez!
Alex Tanner
10 months ago
Hello Michael
Simple but effective, I reckon all us blokes been there at sometime. Alex
Michael Anthony
10 months ago
Probably a widespread…
Probably a widespread experience. Thanks for the visit Alex!