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All the lines are down!

In my mind religion
has no place or time.
I've forgiven everyone
in the race that I've run.

This is just my point of view
bridges have been burned.
People in their lves
don't seem to have the time.

They just can't sit and talk
to comfort an old friend.
With thier stale trite sentences
nothing can be done.

Maybe if they'd change their tone
I could divert my own mind.
Back to a more peaceful time
when it had more meaning.

My song is yet unsung!..

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Region, Country: South Ogden, Utah, USA

Favorite Poets: Jon Anderson, Jon Ondrasik, Donald Fagen, Sting, Eric Bloom , and all of the poets at neo.

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John Leslie O'Kelley

John Leslie O'Kelley

1 year 4 months ago

Mark

I hope that you're doing alright. Merry Christmas to you too. Thank you for reading this.