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Father

I kept trying to traverse a chasm before me,
seeking a presence I longed for, but never offered
on a barren range dotted by clouds in the distance.

It took me some time to realize
there were distances that couldn’t be reached
by trying to get there.

— Michael Anthony, Dec 18, 2024

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Critiques

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

1 year 5 months ago

Powerful

I've read this a few times now. Your words, every one making this count. I think this is perfect as it is. You should be very pleased with this. Ruby xxx :)

Lavender

Lavender

1 year 5 months ago

Father

Hello, Michael,
I agree - perfect.
Thank you,
L