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Sep 06, 2024
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Poetically Crude
For the cloak of spontaneity,
Is often born of impropriety,
Lest...
A heart withers to form a wisecrack in character.
True to the core.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I truly appreciate your constructive critique and welcome any suggestions that can improve on how the poem is structured.
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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1 year 1 month ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
The poem "Poetically Crude" explores the idea that spontaneity can sometimes stem from impropriety, potentially leading to a transformation in character. The juxtaposition of spontaneity and impropriety is intriguing, highlighting the complex nature of human behavior. The use of language is concise and impactful, drawing attention to the consequences of certain actions on one's character. However, the poem could benefit from further development to provide more depth and clarity to the central theme. Consider expanding on the consequences of this transformation or delving into the internal conflict that arises from such a situation. Additionally, refining the structure and flow of the poem could enhance its overall impact on the reader.
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