FOREVER FAREWELL

We said goodbye
without speaking.
Stark silences saturated
by thwarted longing, intolerable feelings

Now past colourful secrets bleed -
Into a created canvas
of new meaning
A still-life of love lost,
A portraiture of forever leavings...

Bjr 2 May, 2011

— Bonitaj, May 02, 2011

About This Poem

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Tip of Southern Africa, ZAF

Favorite Poets: Too many to narrow down, but briefly :, AUDEN, T.S. ELIOT, DICKENSON, RILKE, THOREAU, RUMI ... the list is endless. Am inspired by many, especially those that live lives of "quiet desperation, and go to the grave with a song still in them" (THoreau)

Critiques

Geezer

15 years 1 month ago

I don't...

think I have ever commented on anything you have written before, but something drew me to this one. I saw the breaking up of a couple, and the doubt and feeling of loss. Nice work! ~ Gee

Candlewitch

15 years 1 month ago

Dear Boni,

Now past colourful secrets bleed -
Into a created canvas
of new meaning
A still-life of love lost,
A portraiture of forever leavings...

How can I tell you how brilliant this piece is? It completely covers the feelings of a parting between lovers, or friends! Short but powerful. I wouldn't change a word of it.

always, Cat

Nordic cloud

15 years 1 month ago

Oh what a canvas of feelings

Oh what a canvas of feelings
a farewell made visible and bleak,
reddened by the blood of tears and sadness
in the empty silence of the sky.

We know, we who have experienced this loss,
when we would it were otherwise.

Well expressed bonitaj, Bonny, love from Ann.

magics02

15 years 1 month ago

Very nice Boni

I like the feel and flow of this. Small lines..great meanings. Sums it up to a very good write in my opinion.

Blessings gal
Mona

Bonitaj

15 years 1 month ago

Oh what a canvas of feeling...

Indeed Ann!
Loved your poetic description almost as much as my own piece... ;) many thx for all your supportive comments folks! Much appreciated!
Boni