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brittle light
By brittle light, 30 April, 2011

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jumping
hunched
puddles
billowing trenchcoat
drenched
twisting
twirling umbrella
fitter as litter
I tell ya
negotiating
wind and rain
becomes
dance

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Arrow

14 years 11 months ago

Is jimping a word?

"almost"--oh, argh, I can't decide whether I like that there or not. After reading the poem, it so clearly IS dance that "I tell ya" I kinda don't like it. I'd love to see an illustration for this.

brittle light

brittle light

14 years 11 months ago

jimping changed to jumping ..

jimping changed to jumping ...t'was a typo.
also in deference to your read and take, dropped the "almost"
appreciate your read and comments
thank you