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3rd world problems

We are the same
When I bleed,
When you bleed,
The colour does not change,
We are all the same,
We love,hurt and feel ...the same.

Let's remember that

— kowque, Jun 28, 2024

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Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: ZAF

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neopoet

neopoet

1 year 11 months ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

This poem effectively conveys a message of unity and shared humanity. The repetition of "We are the same" emphasizes the universal experience of pain and emotions. The simplicity of the language used adds to the impact of the message. However, consider exploring more vivid imagery or metaphors to enhance the emotional depth of the poem. Additionally, expanding on the idea of "3world problems" in the title could provide more context and depth to the overall theme.

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John Leslie O'Kelley

John Leslie O'Kelley

1 year 11 months ago

kowque

WORDS OF WISDOM THAT I HAVE NEVER FORGOTTEN! I'M GLAD YOU WROTE THIS, BUT ESPECIALLY THAT YOU ARE STILL WRITING!

John Leslie O'Kelley

John Leslie O'Kelley

1 year 11 months ago

kowque

WORDS OF WISDOM THAT I HAVE NEVER FORGOTTEN! I'M GLAD YOU WROTE THIS, BUT ESPECIALLY THAT YOU ARE STILL WRITING!

Geezer

Geezer

1 year 11 months ago

Hi Koki...

I think that I understand the connection of the title with the theme.
You are saying that no matter the wealth or lack of, all of us, we bleed the same, have the same emotions
and we should remember that. Nicely done, I would think of another title. ~ Geez.
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