( Haiku )

By brittle light, 25 April, 2011

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the poet is lost
cries for help in metaphor
none come to his aid

lou

15 years ago

Hi

I like it very apt.

lou

brittle light

14 years 12 months ago

Hi to you, Lou

thanks...this one almost sounds like the joke form "did you ever hear the one about a poet who got lost?"

Frederick Kesner

15 years ago

of cryptic poetry. And therein lay between lines and rhymes
underneath the allusions and metaphor, a cry from deep within the poet,
I wonder if he really goes unheard. Or is his reader unable to send back
a suitable reply? A strong haiku.

brittle light

14 years 12 months ago

there seems to be more in

there seems to be more in this than I consciously considered....that how it works sometimes....thank god, or somebody. I tend to think my stuff as more shallow than I wish it to be. I'm grateful when others perceive something of substence or relative depth. Bolstering my shakey poetic ego

thanks for your always mellifluous comments

Frederick Kesner

14 years 12 months ago

the quiet truth

of the poetic matter is that every person that takes pen to paper in poetry has a certain measure of depth to them, even the rhymesters and poeticules, which I don't find surprising but a relief. A depth in the shallows can be very brilliant as well. Keep that chin up Al, your poetic ego is in a safe haven.

CCfire

15 years ago

Clever Haiku lol the matter

Clever Haiku lol the matter of the metaphor? I heard from a wise teacher that nothing is right or wrong in poetry and I adhere to that lol of course it gets me into trouble with the purists but I've never been one to conform :)

brittle light

14 years 12 months ago

thanks again for responding..

thanks again for responding....

you have a beautiful and genuine smile

with respect

CCfire

14 years 12 months ago

Thank you, I will take the

Thank you, I will take the compliment with the grace it was given :)

Race_9togo

14 years 12 months ago

Hey Al

Good Haiku.

"Mataphor" = "Metaphor"?

brittle light

14 years 12 months ago

Jim

thanks for the spelling correction....and the comment

magics02

14 years 12 months ago

I like it

Hello BL how are you. I just came across this and I read it once, twice, three times and there is a sublime message in it. Good Haiku. Lood forward to reading more of you.

Blessings
Mona