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Jan 28, 2024
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Aquarius
Aquarius
Written by Kelly Ann Wilson
Women of the water
Sea salt is our perfume
You can find us by the seashore
Painting with every shade of blue
We sing an untamed siren’s song
But take a mermaid’s form
Look deeper than the surface
At the late January born
Written January 26, 2024
© 2024 Kelly Ann Wilson
— Kelly Ann Wilson, Jan 28, 2024
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About This Poem
Last Few Words: Read my writer’s blog at https://kwilsonarts.wordpress.com
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Critiques
Candlewitch
2 years 4 months ago
hello Kelly Anne,
This poem is really pretty. I like it a lot. Are you an Aquarian? I am a cusp born Aquarian/Pisces. born February 18th. I find Astrology kind of interesting. I really like these lines:
Women of the water
Sea salt is our perfume
You can find us by the seashore
Painting with every shade of blue
*hugs, Cat
Geezer
2 years 4 months ago
Here...
I have two suggestions, one is to delete the word [with] in the last line.
The other is to change the word [storm] for the word [born] in the last line.
Nice stuff. ~ Geezer.
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